foxglove (Haiku)
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Silken mouthed dewdrops
Drifting upon Autumn pool
Snared on wary moss
Drifting upon Autumn pool
Snared on wary moss
Sorrows woven
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
I like the personification here. I'd never think of moss being wary, but it makes sense when you consider it. Thanks for sharing this well-written haiku.
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
thank you queenjellybean (love the name) :)
Haiku is one of my favourite styles of poetry.. this is my first attempt at actually writing a whole one.
Haiku is one of my favourite styles of poetry.. this is my first attempt at actually writing a whole one.
Sorrows woven
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
lovely image and great first, good job.
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
Dearest bumblebee, your words here are beautiful. Dewdrops snared on wary moss is just so clever and brought a vivid
Image into my mind. Just beautiful.
Much Love,
ladylynnmary
Image into my mind. Just beautiful.
Much Love,
ladylynnmary
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
foxy - I'm trying to picture dewdrops drifting on
that pool, with the moss fishing for them, knowing
they don't belong there....and.....are precious enough
for the moss' purposes....
Very subtle vision, written in cool wet ink....
drew
that pool, with the moss fishing for them, knowing
they don't belong there....and.....are precious enough
for the moss' purposes....
Very subtle vision, written in cool wet ink....
drew
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
I echo, Appleofmyeyes, version of "dewdrops entangled in the moss." A lovely Haiku, bumblebee.
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thank you so much to all of you for your lovely words :)
Sorrows woven
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
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And having been caught by wary moss become pearls.Your words are very beautiful.Congratulations
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
'Silken mouthed' yes they are, and that's a lovely way of putting it. Foxgloves are one flower I always grow in my garden. Well done.
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
Lovely imagery here bumblebee, a well penned (w)rite worthy of the spotlight. Excellent first attempt of the Haiku style.
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thank you so so much all of you :)
Sorrows woven
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
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Re: foxglove (Haiku)
This is really beautiful. I love the imagery! You've evoked quite a lot in such few lines. Congrats on your spotlight!
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I love how this was build on vivid imagery; it's beautiful and effective take on the topic, and it creates a wonderful image in the reader's mind.
Neat haiku, and well-deserved Spotlight- Congratulations!
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Neat haiku, and well-deserved Spotlight- Congratulations!
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