Novella

[Sasha]

Prologos|

sights touched
fingertips traded fragmentary
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]breaths.

• It was in that gasping second
  I penned you as a worst-selling novel
  though I’m no novelist.
  and you were there too;
  pro-noun-cing my thoughts
  for our soulless readers -
  we only share the lovability
  of our pathetic novella with.
  
  We stacked three hundred and sixty five
  dusks and dawns, scribbling down
  lexicality of ardour.
  and we agreed to eclipse our inked romance
  day in your memory, day in mine.
  Frightened of highest shelves’ dust
  digesting the death of our characters
  Plot, settings, and extempore dialogues.
  and as we dot the last line of a sequel
  (they keep getting worse and worse)
  we dance on the “da dum”
  as our laughter echoes in the far, far away solitary nights.
  [space][/space][space][/space]And we live to live that routine.

Epilogos|

sights touched
fingertips traded fragmentary
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]breaths.

[ladymaybebaby]

Oh how I loved this! My favorite line has to be 'we dance on the “da dum”' because it's so personal for me as a writer. I can remember getting fussed at for not hitting my da-dums on a sonnet and I've never ventured into Shakesperean sonnet land since. I swear it's because of my southern accent that my da is your dum but this guy just kept at it! I love this piece, the whole thing! The references are gorgeous, another piece to be bookmarked for sure! Beautiful work Sasha!

-R
xoxo

[Larsen M. Callirhoe]

Wow Sasha this is one cool write. i could wean so much from this. Like LadyMaybeBaby My favorite line too is 'we dance on the “da dum”' - one nifty way of putting it my friend. This is bookmarked. My favorite write of yours so far. so exalt dear sweet lady.

Victor

[Robert Haigh]

A very clever and inventive write. The Novella allegory is truly apposite! How many of us have not felt as though we caught up in some bad Novella from which we could see no escape? Many will identify with this write, I'm sure.

[ladylilith]

This is such a cool concept. I adore how you carried it through with such an exciting and electric use of langauge. I particularly like the sound of this as I read, it just felt right. Also, I enjoyed a sense of the real in the emotion here, that there is a twisted, or more, life-like kind of love at work. Because we're not all bestsellers, we can't all have that chart topping, epic length fantasy novel of a romance, and heck, who'd want that? I'll have a novella thanks.

Well anyway, my musings aside, a stunning piece of poetry. I love this. Great way to frame it too. Neat!!

Lily^^

[everhopeful]

I enjoy your writing themed poems, you have developed the knack of fully exploring the metaphor in a way which really fits like a glove. What strikes me about this one is how there's something which isn't perfect about the relationship, in fact there's more than a hint of imperfection, yet it is still a celebration of a period of time. Some excellent turns of phrase throughout, "lexicality of ardour" for example really made me smile, as well as the reference to the dreaded Iambs! The repetition of your prologue as an epilogue said a lot to me too.
Ever-eloquent work Sash-Sash!

[dornicks]

Laden with feeling in words that were carved to fit together. A good read -and a bit more. Thank you for sharing this,

dornicks

[Jovel320]

Living and writing are the main staples in my life. Your poem describes my routine. We have to let these things out otherwise I believe I would explode.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts!!!
Jovel320

[Forestdawn]

This is a perfection in free verse. Love the flow. An indepth message of emotional thought. This is a pure masterpiece. Good work. I loved it.

[Zojourn]

This is truly exemplary! I love the way you grasp and showcase the concept, where emotions are simply shoulder-shrugged, and romance is eloquently penned as "And we live to live that routine", no matter the amount of dust acquired upon a sequel. This is a perfectly phrased (w)rite, and I could not help but absolutely adore your use of metaphor and imagery-laced language within this piece. Immensely enjoyed!

~Z

[Ladywildalice]

A most wonderful write, fully enjoyed and much envied. Oh if I could write like this, I would die a happy woman. LOL. An honor so very well deserved. Congratulations. Most beautifully accomplished. Sue

[Josie]

I loved your way of relating your writing to a troubled love affair. My favorite part:
We stacked three hundred and sixty five
dusks and dawns, scribbling down
lexicality of ardour.
and we agreed to eclipse our inked romance
day in your memory, day in mine.

Thank you so much for sharing and being on the TPS Spotlight.

[dwells]

Can't judge a book by its cover Sash and this one line in particular ..."dust from the highest shelf..." sealed my attention to the beauty of what followed in plaintive and particular tones of consideration towards our destination unknown, cheers!

[Dew]

For me, it eclipsed short ideas like enjoying a thing or losing a thing or loving a person or losing a person...both literally and metaphorically, to me it embraced the fullness of living, which explores both sides of our calling...to be hurt by what heals and to be healed by what hurts. Just my own little tangent of a thought you sent me swinging off on! Love your word choice...some of those lines were rare gems! Congrats and well deserved!!!!! - dew

[wendellgee]

really cool. read this several times over a couple days and it started to get through. real diamond like complexity to this.

[flux]

Stylish, and a well-deserved spotlight. For me this is a good example of a poet finding their own voice, a voice, a style that sets them apart and earns them distinction.

[everhopeful]

A really well constructed piece of poetry with so much to take in that I'm as impressed and enthusiastic about it second time around as I was on the first read. There is a playful side to this one, conveying a sense of fun within a relationship, skilfully underpinned by the extended metaphor of a relationship evolving like the creation of a story.
Much enjoyed and admired, congratulations on the spotlight!

[allmirth]

I fall more in love with your poetry and style with each poem I read. I am so glad this is Spotlighted because I had missed it and I think it is my new favorite of yours. Congratulations indeed.

Thanks so much for sharing.
Mirthy

[Rainman]

A rich and articulate piece, so well composed, too. The '365' made me think of a diary or journal in which the relationship unfolds, and at the same time the whole of it is contained in the very first moment.
The prologue and epilogue were of course perfect bookends.
Am I impressed with this poem?
Yes, I am impressed!
Great piece.

[maggetator]

This piece is so enchanting, and I love the comparison with reading/writing. I loved how you had two separate parts, the prologue and epilogue. Very clever.