Ta ta, Alice

Post by **danielraythomason** » April 18th, 2012, 11:55 pm

I invited her to my tea party,
A fair girl by the name of Alice.
I took her blonde tress and
let it brew in my tea cup,
*takes sip* Ahhhhhh!
Just wait till we get to the
entrée.

Post by **Etchers** » April 19th, 2012, 12:33 am

Creepy. I hope I don't think of this poem next time I watch the Alice In Wonderland Disney film, I think it may make it creepier than I'd like.

Post by **danielraythomason** » April 19th, 2012, 2:25 am

DJK - Would you like to come over for dinner? O.O

Etchers - I apologize if I've ruined your childhood. :)

Thanks for the comments, guys!

Post by **ladylilith** » April 19th, 2012, 12:25 pm

Simply fabulous! So much fun! ..Is it wrong to think this is fun? *shrugs* I enjoyed it. The title is inspired and I love the simplicity of it, unapologetic and darkly exciting. I always admire an exploration and evolution of an well-known tale. Alice has to be one of my favourites anyway, the tale in its original form is madder than a hatter! Ha!

Ace work. Love this one a lot.

Lily^^

Post by **FrankieVC** » April 19th, 2012, 12:33 pm

love the spookiness very nice write

Post by **danielraythomason** » April 19th, 2012, 2:27 pm

ladylilith - Don't worry, I always get a kick from poems like this. It's okay to drown in the transgression. :P

FrankieVC - Thanks, dude! Glad you enjoyed it. :)

Post by **michpete** » April 19th, 2012, 2:52 pm

Time Burton and Alice in Wonderland (or Underland I suppose) are two of my favorite things ever and you managed to capture them both in that little dity but maybe a touch darker. Bravo, nicely done sir.

Post by **XoSililoque** » April 19th, 2012, 3:05 pm

This was made all the more creepy for its playfulness. I loved it. Thanks for the enjoyable read

Post by **danielraythomason** » April 19th, 2012, 3:25 pm

Thanks guys! Glad I could give your dark sides a bit of a gentile tugging. :D

Post by **Ladywildalice** » April 19th, 2012, 4:09 pm

Chilling and creepy on so many levels, as has been reiterated already, but just to add my meager words of approval. But............................I'm changing my name tomorrow.

Post by **danielraythomason** » April 19th, 2012, 4:39 pm

Haha! Would you also like to join me for tea? O.O

LOL

Thanks for the feedback!

Post by **danielraythomason** » April 20th, 2012, 1:31 pm

Thanks, dude! Glad you enjoyed it! :) :) :)

Post by **Ladywildalice** » May 21st, 2012, 9:36 am

DRT...... this gave me shivers and made me want to rush right out and change my name. Good job at "creepingly weird".

Post by **inflames** » May 21st, 2012, 6:33 pm

A very spooky wrote. Nicely done!

Post by **Whiskurz** » May 22nd, 2012, 7:50 pm

Watch out for the small bones that get stuck in your teeth.....Good write my friend.....Whisk

Post by **Jahaliel** » June 10th, 2012, 8:11 pm

this is brilliant! Congrats on the Spotlight, it totally deserves it, dark spooky with such undercurrents.. Amazing work!!

Post by **danielraythomason** » September 10th, 2012, 12:32 am

Thank you!

Post by **YoursTrulyZsa** » February 18th, 2013, 5:10 pm

Exquisite!
Zsa

Post by **danielraythomason** » February 19th, 2013, 8:59 pm

Why, thank you!

Post by **Larsen M. Callirhoe** » February 24th, 2013, 12:50 am

why haven't i commented yet on this deeply riveting poem. all i can say is i dunno. this is dark, and disturbing in a good way DRT. very creepy but loved your reality perception here. enjoyed.

victor

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