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slide a finger over my lips,
glide over my breasts
and down over my thighs.
breathe me.
you make me feel alive-
i want to feel alive-
and at least when it's over,
and my hearts no longer racing,
i'll have a memory,
which is life enough for me.
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I think you already know how much I love this poem, right? Much like a fine wine it only gets better with age and some time to chill. Although it's hard not to get swept away with the bold images, the grandness of the expression and the speaker's racing pulse, it is the subtlety of a line like "breathe me" which acts as the counterpoint to the raging desire.
More than a mere 'memory', this is memorable poetry.
Ever a fan.
More than a mere 'memory', this is memorable poetry.
Ever a fan.
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I enjoyed this Made me think I too might be able to use some risque words in one of my future postings
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Oh yes...very much yes...this says it all in few words, but the few you used were the perfect choice. Peace
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Leaves much to the imagination but catches the essence of passion and desire. Nice writing.
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Re: Memory. (mature)
Hi Flamey. As usual, Mick has outdone everybody with a fantastic review! Not that I could disagree with one word. This is my kinda poetry, minimal with an underlying touch of a poetess. Bathed in sensual passion, one that is trying to be restrained, but cannot, it seeps and oozes with such confident reflection. I adored this, every single word.
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Thanks for the reviews everyone. :)
And yes, Mick, as always, outdoing everyone with his comments, haha.
And yes, Mick, as always, outdoing everyone with his comments, haha.
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Oh, it's so nice to feel that passion you exude - write more, flames - I'll be a fan - Love, Bill
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Well, as Mick has said it best, I will only at my thanks that you have shared this true poetry.
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Well uh..(adjusting clothing) yea this was a stimulating affair here. As with myself, I probably would always post in The Heart it would be my instinctive nature to post here but I'm trying to focus on other sides of my writing needs to be developed but I'll come back to my first enjoyment in writing love poems....
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Memory is malleable.
You are not. This aches to me. But I love the progression.
You are not. This aches to me. But I love the progression.
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Thanks you two. :)
As always, fantastic to have a comment from you, palehorse. You flatter me. :)
As always, fantastic to have a comment from you, palehorse. You flatter me. :)
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This is enough to get anyone sweating,very passionate.Loved the ending.very nice work...thanks for sharing
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inflames~Mick is so good at interpreting poet's piece's and I have to echo what he has said in that this is TRULY a memorable piece and a bookmark from me...just BEAUTIFUL and such a joy to read your pen...as it is not often enough....Musie
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inflames~It appear's as though I was the last to comment on this, now I am the first to Congratulate you on a well Deserved Spotlight! Loved it then, Love it once again...such a passionate write does not go unnoticed and thus we find it in the Spotlight! CONGRATULATIONS! Musie
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Charming idea...the memory of good luvin is sometimes better than half-hearted engagements...me really likey! Congrats on getting spotted!!!!! - dew
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Sensuality is perhaps the most difficult thing to get right in poetry. I think you pitched it perfectly here.
I like how you touched on the notion of memory, it's a more complicated subject than is often realised.
Some things we remember, but most things we merely know that they happened.
Nice work.
I like how you touched on the notion of memory, it's a more complicated subject than is often realised.
Some things we remember, but most things we merely know that they happened.
Nice work.