We Shall Overcome

[Balustrade]

I hear your voice
In the silent early morning hour
You call me from a place so far away
Carried on a misty breeze
And tender autumn showers
You usher light into my solitary day

I hear your voice
In the dungeons of my yielding heart
You sprinkle your rhythm onto my blues
Sent over happy beats
Milliseconds apart
Echo is only sweet when it is bouncing off of you

Sing your whispers into my core
So I can waltz into forevermore

Music and magic astride your breath
Together we shall overcome your death

[amaranthus]

This is a beautiful piece, steeped in sadness. Like a bittersweet memory.

[SinLoi]

At first I liked it but was somewhat lost. Then got to the end and was hit hard by it. Had to read it again and everything was in place. It hurt to re-read knowing the ending. Thank you for posting this

[everhopeful]

I always appreciate poetry like this, the kind which is undeniably sad, even tragic in nature, yet still speaks in a way which celebrates someone's life. Knowing they have left enough of their spirit behind in someone's heart speaks volumes about them as a person, and if they can still inspire them then there is no finer tribute to their life, even though their loss will be forever mourned.
A well composed poem, with a subtle form and hard-hitting content.

[things_i_wrote]

this is such a great lament for someone i liked it because the speaker is trying to overcome something
tragic and left a deep hurt inside him ..wonderful poem

cheers..TIW

[Balustrade]

The only way to keep a lost loved one alive is to keep the memory alive.

[Rassy48]

This is as if you looked into MY heart and knew what I was thinking and feeling. One year after the loss of my beloved husband, my thoughts and feelings are revealed here in your creation. I do miss him so much! Your last two lines are the core of this write. Thank-you for reminding me, my friend.

Joanne

[Darkness]

I like the way this implies that strength can still be drawn from someone who has passed on. It's sad, but comforting at the same time.

[Balustrade]

Coming to think of it, there is no other way but to draw strength. Otherwise...

[Dew]

powerful ending! how can someone help you that isn't here? because the love they gave lasts and lasts in unexpected ways...only you can live your life, but even lost love can catalyze a waning spirit. Congrats on the spotlight! Well done! Sometimes when we're drained, its good to lean back and soak what we can from a giving environment. I love TPS for that. peace - dew

[amaranthus]

Yay! I loved this poem from the first I read it, for I have lost many dear loved ones by an early age. Congrats on the spotlight!

[potentialpoet]

I like the way you compressed so much into so few lines. Every word seems significant. I thought I was reading a nice love poem and then it turned into a tragic love poem. I love that it fell off the table, so to speak. I was really surprised and pleased by that. I also feel the pace of the poem is well suited to its content.

Great work!

[dornicks]

I like the way you dealt with this topic. Memories like this ease the pain of loss,somewhat. Well worded and formed. Congratulations on the Spotlight and Thank you for sharing this,

dornicks

[MikelFirewalker]

I hear your voice
In the silent early morning hour
You call me from a place so far away
Carried on a misty breeze
And tender autumn showers
You usher light into my solitary day

I hear your voice
In the dungeons of my yielding heart
You sprinkle your rhythm onto my blues
Sent over happy beats
Milliseconds apart
Echo is only sweet when it is bouncing off of you

Sing your whispers into my core
So I can waltz into forevermore

Music and magic astride your breath
Together we shall overcome your death

this poem is such a huge gift to all our hearts!...and for me it is no less so...

I have probably spent more time thinking on this subject than on any other one in my lifetime, and have finally decided, after many years and many funerals of people I love, that death is a lie...

perhaps one of the greatest struggles we have as human beings is learning to realize that, learning to know it in the deepest, most secret places of our beings...

for what are we when we are absent from our bodies?

what were we before we were present in our bodies?

what are we now?

each of us truly needs to find for him/herself the answers to those three questions...

and speaking for my own self alone, I am sensing myself slowly growing to understand that the "I" that I am, whether inside or outside a physical body, is forever alive...


michael

[Ladywildalice]

Balustrade.......this truly did make me tear up. But it also had a soothing effect, and that seems odd and strange given the content, but it was almost a whisper of promise, that passion is never completely lost, just slipped away into a crevice or a dark smudged corner, and with enough faith and hope, it will surface, albeit briefly, it will surface and reassure you that once .........you had it all. Excellent and congratulations on the Spotlight. I am very envious of this wonderful piece.

[JASON]

A really well deserved spotlight - congratulations!
' you usher light into my solitary day' is superb...

[Balustrade]

I have often looked back and wondered.. what happened? Where did life go wrong, or was it me/us? How could I have been so stupid to sacrifice all for nothing? And now, when it is too late, I can only grieve and lament, and try to draw strength and inspiration. It shouldn't have been this way.

[Josie]

"Sing your whispers into my core", yes, that is what keeps me strengthened with the will to love others as I have been loved. Beautiful! Congratulations on the TPS Spotlight.

[Balustrade]

I thank everyone for the considerate comments and immense support. Loss can never be obliterated nor fully accepted. Yet, there are ways of retaining the sweet part of the memories and partly locking out the bad ones.

[A.k.ChaosDream]

This deserves its place in the spotlight, it is a gem that radiates love that endures and transforms into strength. Beautiful write