Steganographic Drivel

[Agentlenihilist]

Sorry if you are tired of seeing my name on here but I have been writing up quite the storm...what can I say, it's winter.


This is
Emotion at its
Most simplistic
Like a soldier
Of misfortune
Haphazardly
Conscripted
And I’d like
To keep moving
But my legs
Are too rigid
And I’d love
To have
The time
But I can’t
Grasp that dimension
And I’d love
To know why
It’s probably
Sedition
All my
Thoughts want
To break free
But there is
Only ever
Friction

[everhopeful]

Don't apologise, I like this poem a lot. Even the note itself adds to the subtle sense of self-depreciation which runs through this from the title onwards, yet it's done with a light touch which stops the poem from slipping into those murky waters of self-pity. There's also a touch of humour within the word play too, which I love seeing in sadness poetry, if that doesn't sound too contradictory - I don't think all sadness poetry has to be doom and gloom, there's still space for something lighter. The delayed rhyme was a nice touch too, it added even further to the appeal.
Really enjoyed this one, well penned.

[Lich]

Enjoyed the wordplay too. This is indeed quite well penned. Loved the read, nihilist. I look forward to reading more of your work, especially if they share this wit.

[karrie]

I agree with the above comments! Well done and much enjoyed!

[Theymakeyouwait]

I enjoyed reading it. My favorite lines were the last 4 and "And I’d love
To have
The time
But I can’t
Grasp that dimension"
I felt they were well written and thought provoking. Thanks for sharing

[Agentlenihilist]

thanks for reading and commenting. and question, did you guys get the hidden message going through the lines? Or does my steganography need work?

[shays1]

It was what I read first, the hidden message, then the comments, now I'll go read the poem since it got noticed and is now in the spotlight. Congrats!

Nicely done.

[Windsend]

Well done. Great poem and play on words. Much deserving of the spotlight.

[karrie]

I got the hidden message when I first read this. I love the way this falls, kind of soft and slow. Congratulations on the well deserved Spotlight!

[rupertpupkin]

Lovely poem. Looks a bit like snow falling. Really well done on the spotlight. Most deserving.

[kryssi_nykki]

THIS! this... i loved everything about it. I don't think i've seen anything like it before but it's a pretty great poem. Congrats on the spotlight

[Philip16]

"a soldier of misfortune haphazardly conscripted"
I don't think I would ever have thought of this concept, but now that you
bring up the image...I can relate! Your poem, to me, is the lament of the
square peg. Really enjoyed.
Now, as far as the hidden message, I tried thinking of the poem as an acrostic,
but it did not work. I tried reading just the first word of each line, no luck.
Last word of each line, no luck. I then changed the power of my readers from
1.75 to 2.25 and ... eureka!
Congrats on the spotlight!
Philip16

[Josie]

I could not put your poem down. I was beginning to think my eyes were going bonkers, when it dawned on me that it was not my eyes, but your delightful wit. Thank you for the fun. and congrats on the spotlight. One word to summarize the poem was 'turmoil'. Love keeps us in that spin when we don't know which way to turn ,