Yes, and I do too

Post by **inthesemoments** » February 22nd, 2015, 12:32 am

When you tell a girl you love her
And she says, “yes, and I do too,”
Let your lungs loose and let them scatter
What she means to you to the world.
Take her to the mountaintop
Where you can’t breathe,
And hear the echoing of your voice.
Remember that feeling
Because breathless is how you should feel.
Hear yourself say you love her again,
Again, and again
That you may never forget that you do,
And that perhaps she may not too.
But on that mountaintop as you bellow
Don’t forget to take her hand
Because you might lose her in the clouds.
Heaven is a tough place to find angels,
And the clouds can make you forget
That one can fall.
Should you lose her or should you fall
You will be breathless again.
You will hear again,
Again and again, “I love you.”
Again and again, “Yes, and I do too.”
Yet you know this is not true anymore,
That you are gone from the mountaintop
Just hearing echoes of what it felt like
Up there in heaven.

Post by **dwells** » February 22nd, 2015, 2:08 am

Welcome to TPS and I really enjoyed the treatment you gave to a timeless topic - "First cut is the deepest" (Cheryl Crowe). I had some initial confusion with the reply; thinking a possible satire was in the works, but that was my own over-complication of a delightful piece that everyone should read and remember (young and old alike). Much wisdom here, especially our tendency to sometimes over work the meaning of love maybe - cheers ITM! - Dan

Post by **karrie** » February 22nd, 2015, 6:08 am

I really like this. I agree with the above comment. Well done!

Post by **Ladywildalice** » February 23rd, 2015, 4:06 pm

There is a double-sided sword in the room that no one wants to think about. Often, especially with very young love, the tendency to reply "I do too" is mouth service. And then again, there is a tendency, once Love is found and acknowledged, to sometimes let it slip away by not working to keep it alive. So one must never forget, be true with your words and your emotions, be careful with someone else's heart, but when Love is in your world, never take it for granted or let it wither through inattentiveness. Good write, thank you for sharing it.

Post by **karrie** » February 24th, 2015, 7:00 am

I am so happy to see this spotlighted! Wonderful and congratulations!

Post by **JASON** » February 24th, 2015, 8:54 am

Reciprocated love - step 1 complete.
beware of the mountain top gusts, they can catch you unawares

congrats on the spot.

Post by **BarryC** » February 24th, 2015, 10:37 am

excellent choice for the spotlight-well done

Post by **LorettaYoung** » February 24th, 2015, 6:52 pm

Nicely written message of how important it is to be grateful with open eyes ad heart. Congratulations, Loretta

Post by **inthesemoments** » February 24th, 2015, 8:18 pm

I didn't expect a welcome as warm as this! Thank you all! And thank you for finding my write worthy of the spotlight :)

Post by **Mike6** » February 25th, 2015, 4:32 pm

Welcome to TPS, what a way to make your mark! Such a powerful poem. I loved the imagery. Everything was so well put together, the repetition served a purpose and was well executed. Great poem. Congrats on the spotlight. :)

Post by **inflames** » February 28th, 2015, 11:29 pm

"I love you" is a hard thing. This really exhibited that well. Good work with this– congrats on your spotlight!

Post by **everhopeful** » March 2nd, 2015, 4:24 pm

Welcome to TPS!
Sometimes it's easy to become very cynical as a writer, even as a person, so it's refreshing to read a poem which is such a joyous celebration - and it's in tribute to something worth celebrating too!
You've written this with infectious enthusiasm and a style which, while it could certainly have personal and private relevance, is still engaging to the neutral reader, allowing them to place themselves into the poem.
Congratulations on the spotlight!

Post by **Ladywildalice** » March 2nd, 2015, 4:54 pm

Congrats on the Spotlight for this well deserved write.

Post by **inthesemoments** » March 10th, 2015, 6:36 pm

Thank you to all of you for the welcome. This poem of mine derives a lot from real life. I appreciate you are all with me even just through the pen and through TPS of course :)

Post by **Liddie** » March 11th, 2015, 6:43 am

Such a nice poem. If only we could always hang on to the feeling of that first "I love you" to always rediscover the magic and never be disillusioned... you beautifully captured the feeling a very deserving poem!

Post by **inthesemoments** » March 12th, 2015, 12:32 am

Liddie wrote:Such a nice poem. If only we could always hang on to the feeling of that first "I love you" to always rediscover the magic and never be disillusioned... you beautifully captured the feeling a very deserving poem!

You found my poem haha I'm particularly proud of this one. This is the first real one I've written in 4 years. I wrote this right after she told me that she can't love me anymore. I wrote this coming out of a dark and dramatic time. We can't preserve first loves, but new loves are firsts in their own ways anwyway

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