beached

[Jim]

Full moon aglow,flood tide reaching in, ever closer, her toes in wet sand,
'Steady', she whispers, sighs, 'steady', as wave on wave the delta swells.


stars,
sea breeze -
our bodies

[ObsidianMule]

If any piece would benefit from a haibun, this is it.

[Jim]

Ok. how's this.

[dwells]

The swollen delta does conjure up an image Jim, and the sand in the bottom of the bathtub afterwards, a memory or two; thanks for taking me back. Those fiddler crabs always made me nervous, cheers!

[cesario]

old man, you were in rare form when you wrote this ...
from the haiku community: many bows. many bows and with my continued respect.
cesario (from Shakespeare)

[mangodog]

wow, Jim, a bounty of summer suggestions from these
5 words...



drew

[Jim]

Thanks guys
I guess the haibun suggestion worked out.
Thanks OM for pointing that out.

[seraph1420]

This is crazy..you just ended it with "our bodies"
That is like saying that there's nothing else that'd rather be more beautiful under the stars in the sea breeze. Period.
Absolutely brilliant. Congrats on the Spotlight

Seraph

[BarryC]

a fabulous piece of work-deserves the spotlight

[Josie]

Your powerful five words do a lot of work. The prose part of the haibun added 'flood tide' and ' delta swells'.
Is it a love scene or tragedy? The toes are mentioned being in wet sand, so that sounds safe. Bodies made me think of dying, but 'Our bodies' implies alive. Congratulations on the TPS Spotlight.

[allmirth]

Masterful, good sir, masterful. A piece made to live in the Spotlight.

Thanks so much for sharing.
Mirthy