Bittersweet Interlude
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While watching a dying ember
Did you muse, did you remember
Echoes of days gone by
Lost, like the warmth of a forlorn sigh
Faded remembrances
Secret images of lost romances
Glimpses of a bitter sweet yesterday
Yellowing glossies carefully filed away
Could you recall the burning
Of the intimacies of the yearning
Or were you unable to focus, unable to see
The borders of a lost reality
Did you wish to begin anew
What has so quickly flew
To dance once more the dance of spring
To soar again on a gossamer wing
And then, when the ember faded
Did you feel sad, did you feel jaded
Did the darkness of the night intrude
Upon your moment, of bittersweet interlude
Did you muse, did you remember
Echoes of days gone by
Lost, like the warmth of a forlorn sigh
Faded remembrances
Secret images of lost romances
Glimpses of a bitter sweet yesterday
Yellowing glossies carefully filed away
Could you recall the burning
Of the intimacies of the yearning
Or were you unable to focus, unable to see
The borders of a lost reality
Did you wish to begin anew
What has so quickly flew
To dance once more the dance of spring
To soar again on a gossamer wing
And then, when the ember faded
Did you feel sad, did you feel jaded
Did the darkness of the night intrude
Upon your moment, of bittersweet interlude
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
Love that phrase, bittersweet interlude. It almost sounds like an affair. A big fan of rhyme, I love some of your female rhymes ember - remember and intrude - interlude. For me the rhyme must never be for convenience but for conveyance and you have alluded skilfully to what I translated as a memory of what was...the bittersweet hints at something that was, but shouldn't have been and now further down the road the heart yearns from within the routine confines of what is now.
It's nice to see people write like this beside the more minimalist forms
It's nice to see people write like this beside the more minimalist forms
....I am who I am despite my past - not because of it......(me 1990).
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
Dear Farkas,
I love the elegance of your language usage. It flows beautifully off the tongue (I often read poetry out loud, as It seems to have more depth of meaning that way. And I believe that this poem is only enhanced by it!) Your rhyming and structure is sublime. My favorite (although hard to choose) verse is:
Could you recall the burning
Of the intimacies of the yearning
Or were you unable to focus, unable to see
The borders of a lost reality
Yes...something that once was shared, but now lost...
always, Cat
I love the elegance of your language usage. It flows beautifully off the tongue (I often read poetry out loud, as It seems to have more depth of meaning that way. And I believe that this poem is only enhanced by it!) Your rhyming and structure is sublime. My favorite (although hard to choose) verse is:
Could you recall the burning
Of the intimacies of the yearning
Or were you unable to focus, unable to see
The borders of a lost reality
Yes...something that once was shared, but now lost...
always, Cat
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
The is a lovely rhyme. I appreciate the questions posed.The sense of longing is palpable and stirring. The poem evokes the title wonderfully. Thoroughly enjoyable read.
Thanks much for sharing.
Mirthy
Thanks much for sharing.
Mirthy
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
Masterfully written--beautiful use of language, powerful emotions expressed, and haunting memories evoked.
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
brilliant Farkas,outstanding!!
What I am finding is that often times quality poems like this
don't get enough comments...so glad I read this today!
the imagery of a dying fire (flames that have died)
is so incredibly poetic.
What I am finding is that often times quality poems like this
don't get enough comments...so glad I read this today!
the imagery of a dying fire (flames that have died)
is so incredibly poetic.
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
Excellent read!
Provocative, powerful, and vividly impressive in its imagery! Just the "cup of tea" one needs on a Sunday afternoon!
Provocative, powerful, and vividly impressive in its imagery! Just the "cup of tea" one needs on a Sunday afternoon!
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
The rhyme here is great. I especially like the last stanza and the repetition of the title in the main poem. Great work and congrats on your spotlight!
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Re: Bittersweet Interlude
I really liked your technique of questioning to guide the reader through their own remembrances. Congratulations on the TPS Spotlight.