Go Be Lovely

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Go Be Lovely

Post by Tobetta » September 15th, 2015, 1:24 am

Feel the cooler weather now,
Touch the morning sky.
Sit on the edge of the day as it breaks.
Be quiet.
Alone.
Outside.

Who longs for something unknown?
Which of us is satisfied?
Once more the day has come and gone,
Tightly I close my eyes.

The moment I try holding onto,
Slips away into the night.
Remember, forget, find but not keep.
Smile.
Laugh.
Then cry.

You are free now,
Go be lovely -
But first kiss me goodnight.
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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by Dew » September 16th, 2015, 7:51 am

part of me wanted to believe that all time is just one long "now" where no past is lost and no future is too far. - dew



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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by JASON » September 17th, 2015, 3:06 pm

I absolutely adored this poem!!
A fantastic title that speaks volumes on it's own,
backed up by some powerful verse...
my favourite line: 'sit on the edge of the day as it breaks'
stunning work!!



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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by dwells » September 17th, 2015, 5:24 pm

Got a kind of "Let the bird fly free, and if it returns.." feeling from this piece Tobe. "Go be Lovely" speaks volumes though, and does conjure up so many wonderful; yet possibly poignant possibilities at the same time. Delightfully done and cheers! - Dan


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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by Tobetta » September 17th, 2015, 10:34 pm

Thank you all for taking the time to read and for the lovely comments...


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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by mangodog » September 23rd, 2015, 2:41 pm

Tobetta - like Jason I adored this as well!

Holding, letting go, cry then laugh, remember then forget -
yeah it all happens like that so the freedom is in the
acceptance which yields the loveliness. The kiss you
stole as payment for your wisdom...clever clever!!!!


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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by JASON » October 11th, 2015, 3:40 pm

Congrats on the spotlight :bigsmile:
The feelgood factor is beyond wonderful...
One of my alltime favourites right here!!



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Post by continuation » October 13th, 2015, 12:41 am

Congrats on the spotlight. It's well deserved to be sure. Love the light hearted feeling of this write and the consistency of tone. Also appreciated your use of time and space appropriately placed throughout. I feel like reading this took me on a real day's journey and, in the end, I was right back home. Jason is right, feel good factor all around. My heart is all fuzzy!
--Quin



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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by dornicks » October 13th, 2015, 2:21 pm

Congratulations on the Spotlight for this outstanding write,truely deserving of it. Thank you for sharing,

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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by krake » October 13th, 2015, 9:02 pm

This belongs in the spotlight. Excellent job. I am amazed at what some of you here at TPS can create and this is no exception. I love it.



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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by riversidepoet » October 17th, 2015, 12:42 pm

what a beautiful , beautiful poem, just loved it , from the title to the end, "
The moment I try holding onto,
Slips away into the night.
Remember, forget, find but not keep.
Smile.
Laugh.
Then cry.
thanks for sharing, now Go Be Lovely, for this was sure a lovely poem from a lovely heart, May God bless



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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by Tobetta » November 20th, 2015, 2:29 pm

Oh wow - thank you all so much for the taking the time to read, and for the wonderful comments!


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Re: Go Be Lovely

Post by AlzheimerDreams » November 20th, 2015, 3:38 pm

Hello Tobetta,
Accepting the present and the fact that it slips away and then looking forward to something really nice. Now that's a really positive message for all of us and written in such a flowing way. Thank you - a well deserved Spotlight.


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