Panic (IK)

[allmirth]

Panic

Mulling
Over
Anxious
Achiever
Under
Construction
Self
Deceiver
Spell
Check
Cast
Thousands
Out-
Moded
Going
Nowhere
Special
Needs
Salt

[Mike6]

This is cool. I love how you utilized one word per line it illustrates anxiety at its fullest. I also like how the thoughts are kind of disjointed. Wonderfully written! :D Loved this!!

[everhopeful]

I think the formatting of this one worked perfectly for the theme of the poem, the fractured nature of the delivery adds to the frantic nature of the content, particularly as a lot of the words in isolation don't necessarily convey angst or panic. That is really hard to achieve. I really liked how it had a 'word association' element about it too, like a stream of consciousness spill of words where the speaker's ability to turn each one into an even more negative context emphasised their mind-set. If certain line groups are read alone you can trace the negativity of the speaker in a deeply troubling way. I thought that 'Spell / Check / Cast / Thousands / Out' was a fine example of that.
A very clever piece of poetry.

[Baywriter]

This is cool, Mirthy! I like the way the words play off each other -- I can see how each word connects to next and that allows me to sink into the speaker's train of thought. I especially liked the ending: "Going/Nowhere/Special" followed by "Needs/Salt." The ending surprised me. It was a light take on the feeling that's happening here, but it made me go back and read the whole thing again. From that, I got the sense that the speaker feels insecure, like maybe she feels too simple. The one-word lines really honed in on this idea for me. Well done!

Bay

[dornicks]

A lot said in this unusual structured piece which gave it a life of it's own. I learned and enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing ,

dornicks

[Dew]

omgosh...at first I was like 'whaaaa?' and then I noticed...you can jump into some words and read up or down, then you can jump into other and read inward from above or below...and others you can skip over and see new stuff. what an outstanding idea! BRAVO!!!!!! I'm astounded by it for it's indirect impacts related to panic. When you panic you look all over, you grasp here and there you look in and out you try this and that you freeze in a spot and spin around...this is just remarkable. Certainly my favorite IK piece of all thus far for its originality and playground of possibilities. fun fun fun!!! - dew

[songofmeadow]

This appeals to me, partly as I couldn't construct a poem this way but also the fact it compels the reader to read over agin, it is fun but also tightly woven and I love the 'needs salt' as it seems to explain what precedes in its deficiency, super mx

[Liquid Bear]

This reads like some sort of cramped stream of consciousness which nonetheless perfectly conveys a sense of jittery and nervous thought. Very clever.

Bear

[seraph1420]

Okay, so I read this downwards (twice) and then upwards. It's amazing both ways and fits the title and the board perfectly!
You're amazing!

Seraph

[shays1]

All around great idea for this board, subject and style of writing, which has come to be your preferred style I believe. A light-hearted panic frenzy to get to the finish line of IK couldn't have been more precisely portrayed. Well thought out and delivered.

[RansfordRowe]

A brief but interesting poem.The arrangement of the lines was distinctive and really made it stand out from other poems on the site.I liked the line,self deceiver,you used since I can relate to it from personal experience.Its very sad when we can not be truthful even to ourselves.Drowning in self denial.

[Rosella]

Absolutely can feel disarray, as words each line show real panic to be coherent. The poem is creative.

[jsol]

really enjoyed this one! the structure of the poem stands as a feat of conveyance alone. the one word lines zapped me with not only their meanings and implications but also some sort of narrative behind the implications, which is where it got interesting to go for awhile. but then i just went back and basked in the awesome word choices and how you really ran the full gamut of tumbling worries, from serious sounding stuff like self-deception to the fantastic ending of 'needs salt.' and when i sit back a little i think to myself: perhaps it's the little stuff, over and over again, like sitting down with your just right plate of food and then realizing 'damn i need to go back into the kitchen for some salt,' that subconsciously builds up and bursts into the bigger stuff. super great writing.

[JASON]

I've read this through a few hundred times...
seems to be an uncoordinated ensemble of insecurity...(if that makes sense)
They seem to be groups of 2 lines each, apart from:' going nowhere special'
which could, accompanied by a lack of spice, be the main cause
of this mid life crisis....
My take on it anyway! - congrats on the light
- out moded speaks to me of being unfashionable and older ??

[BarryC]

truly worthy of the spotlight

[dornicks]

My views on your piece haven't changed, I'm pleased to say. Congratulations on the spotlight,

dornicks