LAVENDER SKIES
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[When the lavender skies
Are draped over the violet sea
I feel the salt
Through each pore
Waves come crashing
Sounds of the senses
Faded away
Remembering
The longest day
The infinite shore
Are draped over the violet sea
I feel the salt
Through each pore
Waves come crashing
Sounds of the senses
Faded away
Remembering
The longest day
The infinite shore
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
Nice short step poem that does progress into an abundant thought. Sounds very relaxing, it definitely instills serenity.
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
Being at the ocean always has a "longest day,
infinite shore" kind of feel to it for me, too.
And that salt DOES get into every pore....
This poem was very fresh, invigorating even.....
drew
infinite shore" kind of feel to it for me, too.
And that salt DOES get into every pore....
This poem was very fresh, invigorating even.....
drew
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
Thank you for your wonderful feedback, Aurora, and Mango!!!
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
I enjoyed that this is both vibrantly tactile and strongly ethereal. A great combo for an Enlightened piece.
Thanks much for sharing.
Mirthy
Thanks much for sharing.
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
The longest day....
This was an amazing portrayal of something gritty and, at the same time, gauzy. A strengthening yet delicate peice. Congrats on the spotlight!
Quin
This was an amazing portrayal of something gritty and, at the same time, gauzy. A strengthening yet delicate peice. Congrats on the spotlight!
Quin
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
I was in the Navy for six years and at sea for three (not constantly) but a goodly portion thereof... I never saw a lavender sky or a violet sea while sailing the briny deep. I did see a few violent seas however.
Nevertheless this piece struck a chord deep within me.
In some instances it was a pleasure to leave those infinite shores in other instances it was a difficult thing to do.
I particularly hated to leave Greece with that wonderfully clear, blue and deep Aegean sea. Greece of the late fifties and early 1960's was a paradise of earthly delights.
I do believe that a violet sea would fit right in with the way I remember Greece.
Nevertheless this piece struck a chord deep within me.
In some instances it was a pleasure to leave those infinite shores in other instances it was a difficult thing to do.
I particularly hated to leave Greece with that wonderfully clear, blue and deep Aegean sea. Greece of the late fifties and early 1960's was a paradise of earthly delights.
I do believe that a violet sea would fit right in with the way I remember Greece.
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
continuation wrote:The longest day....
This was an amazing portrayal of something gritty and, at the same time, gauzy. A strengthening yet delicate peice. Congrats on the spotlight!
Quin
Thank you, most kindly, Quin, honored by Your Words!
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moe wrote:I was in the Navy for six years and at sea for three (not constantly) but a goodly portion thereof... I never saw a lavender sky or a violet sea while sailing the briny deep. I did see a few violent seas however.
Nevertheless this piece struck a chord deep within me.
In some instances it was a pleasure to leave those infinite shores in other instances it was a difficult thing to do.
I particularly hated to leave Greece with that wonderfully clear, blue and deep Aegean sea. Greece of the late fifties and early 1960's was a paradise of earthly delights.
I do believe that a violet sea would fit right in with the way I remember Greece.
Thank you, Moe, for a great profound feedback. Your observations are very much apreciated. On ocasion, there is a slightly violet sky here in Norway, its just slightly so, but enough to dream away on and imagine the sky to be a sea, which is what this poem is actually about. Thanks for visiting!
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
I have to start with the final line here, because it seems key to the poem; 'The infinite shore' seems like such a dreamy way of conveying that blurring of the horizon line. I think what I was most drawn to in this was the way the almost violent sound and feel of the ocean had a calming effect on the speaker. It seems as though the speaker was so humbled by the scale of the scene that it put them into a trance.
Although I took the 'longest day' as reference to the solstice, it still reads well as a metaphor for an experience the speaker didn't want to end.
Congratulations on the spotlight!
Although I took the 'longest day' as reference to the solstice, it still reads well as a metaphor for an experience the speaker didn't want to end.
Congratulations on the spotlight!
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
Everhopeful, you always manage to Write such in Depth feedback! Thank you so much for Your Words!!!
All of what you say is woven into the meaning behind this poem. Nature makes me feel Grateful and humbled for in the beauty of nature there is always a reflection of an aspect of myself somehow, and there is purity too...
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All of what you say is woven into the meaning behind this poem. Nature makes me feel Grateful and humbled for in the beauty of nature there is always a reflection of an aspect of myself somehow, and there is purity too...
kornelia
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
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What a dreamy poem. one could feel the sand between the toes. the scent of salty air, and the moist salty taste on the tongue. Your poem was so surreal. You made me believe I was really there on the beach. The colors were very vivid as well. Thanks for posting. great work.
What a dreamy poem. one could feel the sand between the toes. the scent of salty air, and the moist salty taste on the tongue. Your poem was so surreal. You made me believe I was really there on the beach. The colors were very vivid as well. Thanks for posting. great work.
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"The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. They must be felt within the heart." Helen Keller
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Re: LAVENDER SKIES
Forestdawn, thank you much for the lovely Words! I am glad you enjoyed my poem and that you had a good dreamy feeling about it, keep dreams allive...
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