Unreasonable
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I want to go
where hollow flames sing silly songs
while watching icy intellect melting
I want to see
proud scholars weeping
in abject fear of their self-doubt
I want to hear
a young child's laughter
protected from the flow of time
I want to feel
the joy of faith
with skeptic smugness left behind
I want to taste
just a moment of pure, sweet freedom
unfettered by the bonds of reason
where hollow flames sing silly songs
while watching icy intellect melting
I want to see
proud scholars weeping
in abject fear of their self-doubt
I want to hear
a young child's laughter
protected from the flow of time
I want to feel
the joy of faith
with skeptic smugness left behind
I want to taste
just a moment of pure, sweet freedom
unfettered by the bonds of reason
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Re: Unreasonable
An elegant wish list Michael; almost prayerful in tone. We reason from what we know and sadly, we don't know diddly. Especially liked the climate change intro, if that is what you were invoking in particular. Cheers! - Dan
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Re: Unreasonable
I would love to see arrogant scholars weeping
for the greatness they thought they had attained
was not that great
(Sometimes educated people who flaunt their academic prowess
just irk me)...
I love listening to children's laughter...
Your scenarios are not so unreasonable after all !!
for the greatness they thought they had attained
was not that great
(Sometimes educated people who flaunt their academic prowess
just irk me)...
I love listening to children's laughter...
Your scenarios are not so unreasonable after all !!
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Re: Unreasonable
Thanks Jason - The poem is a p----off complaint to myself about my own problems with writing heart-felt, spontaneous poetry. I want to kick the butt of my inner academician.
Michael
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Re: Unreasonable
I agree. This is like a prayer. I've lately found that freedom is being a 48 yo 6 yo and allowing my ridiculous inner child out. She has no social shame at all, but she does have the benefit of experience. Go do it! Be free. Write whatever comes out.
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Re: Unreasonable
An admirable hierarchy of wants. Eloquently put, congrats on your spotlight moment.
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Re: Unreasonable
very cool poem. i really like how you outlined such a radical shift in comprehension as a simple, straightforward wish list. too often, it seems, points such as these are made unnecessarily complex or are connotated with some dogma for the sake of discussion, understanding etc. what you wrote feels free and honest. i particularly like how you write of hearing a child's laughter outside of time. i mean, the whole thing is spot on, but that line manages to perfectly balance itself between the innocence of a child's laughter and the weighty paradox of the 'outside of time' idea. not an easy feat yet you make it look easy. bravo!
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Re: Unreasonable
Michael:
Excellent! The wishes and wants we make are very surreal and honest. Who wouldn't want to taste pure sweet freedom, unfettered by the bonds of reason?
It's all good. I really enjoyed reading this one.
Congratulations on being the Spotlight.
Peace and Thanks
Excellent! The wishes and wants we make are very surreal and honest. Who wouldn't want to taste pure sweet freedom, unfettered by the bonds of reason?
It's all good. I really enjoyed reading this one.
Congratulations on being the Spotlight.
Peace and Thanks
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"The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. They must be felt within the heart." Helen Keller
"The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched. They must be felt within the heart." Helen Keller
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Re: Unreasonable
Great work here I like the surreal feel of this. Wonderful work, congrats on the spotlight.