GOTHICAL RHETORIC

[Kornelia]

O,luminous light,of purification
The raven of my heart
Is sleeping in the dying sea

It`s cloth of feathers
Lies down to rest
Transformation awakens
In the raven`s nest

He told me that
When he became a child
He watched the worlds
And flowers growing wild

He told me of the bottomless soul
Beneath it,I hide,beyond it
I swim the non existing tide

Behind closed eyes
My shadow seems thinner
Than the veiled silence
Of unmasked fear

I am the seer
I am the sight

I am the scar
I am the stain

I am the wound
I am the womb

Born,under the headstone
Of my tomb

[Mr Goth]

a under worldly breath taking experience for sure, off the coast and shores or your very talented and word spun mind like an vortex spiraling out of control
i found the ending to come to quick and who maybe knows that is life. well written and enjoyed

drowning in this masterpiece


Chuck

[dwells]

Korny - this just kept getting better and the end was epic! I never would have guessed where things were going and your structure and word choice were superb for total effect on the unsuspecting reader. Much admired artistry and good to see you again, cheers! - Dan. Always love something nautical too!

[Kornelia]

Thank you much Chuck,and Dan
Honored by your feedback...Glad you (both) enjoyed this poem
The ending was kind of abrupt,yes,It could have been differently but then it would have been another poem.
I never know where my muses take me

greetings,
Kornelia

[dwells]

Unmasked fear; born under the headstone - takes me away to someplace else Korny. I just had to come back for another read, and bask in the dark glow here, cheers! - Dan

[Kornelia]

[quote="dwells"]Unmasked fear; born under the headstone - takes me away to someplace else Korny. I just had to come back for another read, and bask in the dark glow here, cheers! - Dan[/quote

Thank you much for your kind words, this reminds me that I havent made a dark poem in a while

Kornelia

[Kornelia]

I am totally surprised and can\t believe it....Spot light nominated...
Whew, Im in the mood for dancing,
Totally happy , thank you so much for this!!!!

Kornelia

[Rainman]

I liked this, especially the mythic and totemic vision of the bird.
Stanza 2 in particular is excellent, it commands the attention with the rhyme and the vivid image.
The poem has the feel of an incantation.
Nice work, it deserved to be chosen for a spotlight piece in my opinion.

[rupertpupkin]

Well done on the spotlight. A most deserving write.

[Kornelia]

I liked this, especially the mythic and totemic vision of the bird.
Stanza 2 in particular is excellent, it commands the attention with the rhyme and the vivid image.
The poem has the feel of an incantation.
Nice work, it deserved to be chosen for a spotlight piece in my opinion.

Rainman, i am very happy to receive your kind words, It has a bit of an incantation indeed. Sometimes I use this in a personal way and I lie to listen to music that invokes the spirit. I believe in the greater depth of things. Nice meeting you here!

Kornelia

[Kornelia]

Well done on the spotlight. A most deserving write.

Happy to know you enjoyed my work, thank you Rupert!

Kornelia

[jsol]

whew, this is really awesome. i wanted to comment cause i enjoyed it so much but need to read again. thanks!

[Kornelia]

Thank you kindly, happy you enjoyed.

Kornelia