the cherry tree (haibun)
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The cherry tree was 100 feet tall at least and I guess my neighbor worried that it might come down and hit her house. But why take it down this spring when it was a mass of lovely white flowers and a glory to behold. Early Sunday morning the sound of chainsaws and then the final boom. What a shock.
sweet white blossoms
scattered on the green lawn
vernal battlefield
sweet white blossoms
scattered on the green lawn
vernal battlefield
"I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing than to teach ten thousand stars how not to dance" e.e. cummings
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Re: the cherry tree (haibun)
thanks to you both for your nice comments
"I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing than to teach ten thousand stars how not to dance" e.e. cummings
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Re: the cherry tree (haibun)
The wood should be good (just kidding). No cherry blossoms for your neighbor anymore. Kind of sad. Like your Haibun. Very good writing.
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thanks to you both (cherrywood is good, but we didn't get any of it) only a tad more sun and a sad ache.
"I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing than to teach ten thousand stars how not to dance" e.e. cummings
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I have a neighbor who wants me to pull down a 50 year old tree in my front yard. I asked him if the tree was here when he moved in. He told me it was. I told him maybe he should move becaus the tree is staying.
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Oh yes, the removal of a beloved tree is fraught with sadness, an exquisite write with a perfect haiku..Tangie..
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The chainsaw should be the last resort in these emotionally charged situations. Thanks.
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I think the haiku is strong enough to stand on its own... some incredibly strong language, like "vernal battlefield" - really captures the backstory you provided. Did appreciate the backstory, though; makes the haiku feel like a poignant signature to a diary entry.
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Poor cherry tree. Even alive they are shocking and I read too into this. The foolishness of humans-- what we knowingly to what should be sacred.
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Gratz on the spotlight Entwife. Well deserved choice for this weeks spotlight! I enjoyed the beautifully desperate disposition of the haiku's juxtaposition. As well as the beautifully desperate disposition of both the author, and the problems that must have driven the poems leading character into cutting down such a beautiful tree. Maybe a power line, or a pest problem, only that would make sense to me, if at all. I love the springtime blooms. Always a pleasure.
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