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Sometimes

Post by wordsmith » August 16th, 2016, 3:26 am

Sometimes there is darkness in the light
And profound words fall on barren ground
We gravitate towards sin with smiling faces
Negotiating the slippery path of our descent
Some laugh in the face of adversity
Working hard to pay the price
Shaking heads well they surround me
Not once not twice but thrice

Sometimes in the dead of night
We reach for memories
They are fragile like glass leaves
Torn from the branches of our past
Borne upon the wind that is our regret
Knowing that they are not destined to last
And we sigh as moonlight bears witness
To misunderstood tears in our eyes

Sometimes we say yes and smile
While a no screams deep inside
And we run around excuses
Trying to find a place to hide
I recall my mother telling me
That monsters are not real
I wonder what she would say now
If I could tell how I feel


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Re: Sometimes

Post by Ona Sabela » August 17th, 2016, 1:00 pm

"Sometimes we say yes and smile
While a no screams deep inside"
I seriously want this on a t shirt
so I can wear it every single day.
Simply a superb write!


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Re: Sometimes

Post by CarolynKleefeld » August 17th, 2016, 10:40 pm

Thought-provoking and insightful, skillfully composed, with a most wonderful use of language.



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Re: Sometimes

Post by wordsmith » August 17th, 2016, 11:37 pm

Thank you both very much for your most encouraging words
I am most grateful that you took the time to read 'sometimes'
*M*


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Re: Sometimes

Post by tangerinepie » August 18th, 2016, 9:10 pm

I enjoyed the play on words in this piece, a bit abstract but yet well defined in structure.It reflects a very artistic and creative mind.Great work..Tangie..


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Re: Sometimes

Post by riversidepoet » August 19th, 2016, 1:03 pm

beautiful poem, yes I guess we have all been there on those night when our bed is full of regrets and "glass Leaves", so beautifully done and well expressed, thanks for sharing, may God bless



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Re: Sometimes

Post by JASON » August 19th, 2016, 1:49 pm

I absolutely adored this poem !!!
The middle stanza is one of the most profound things I have ever read.



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Re: Sometimes

Post by SirFleshwound » August 23rd, 2016, 2:09 am

This is what spotlight is all about. I gravitate so much towards this delicate observance. Your abstract references make a formidable playground for personal interpretation. The second stanza is outstanding. Regards.



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