My leaves of Autumn

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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by SirDaniel » June 6th, 2012, 10:00 pm

This is a beautiful poem, it uses nature in the background in much the same way a painter would.. but the real star to me is the leaves and how they, like us.. fall into their destiny.. whatever it may be.. Sometimes it seems autumn doesn't wait till the end of the year.

Quite enjoyed, congratulations on the spotlight

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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by gooseberry » June 7th, 2012, 12:38 pm

This is one beautiful poem,superb imagery and a very poignant message!!


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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by RiverRose » June 8th, 2012, 2:16 pm

I love this! This is a metaphor I have thought of, but have never been able to put in the right words, but you have done it masterfully! Congratulations on the Spotlight!
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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by Mazrocon » June 8th, 2012, 3:29 pm

What a refreshing take on Autumn. I've never though of falling leaves being a happy and momentous time... I guess it's probably the only time the leaf will really move at all and it lasts but a split second. From branch to ground is impressively drawn out... making you wish it would last longer.

Long live autumn!

A fabulous piece of poetry my friend... one of the more original takes of fall that I have seen before.

~TIMOTHY~



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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by sophiah » June 8th, 2012, 5:13 pm

I just loved this - so beautifully written and I was utterly captivated beginning to end. A stellar write, and the spotlight much deserved!

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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by allmirth » June 8th, 2012, 5:30 pm

Pleased to find this in the spotlight. Otherwise I would have missed it. Congratulations! I love metaphor and the concept. Deep and profound.

Thanks for sharing.

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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by knpoet » June 9th, 2012, 1:02 pm

A delight to read from beginning to end; very deep and philosophical - and yet at the same time the words were light as a feather - or as soft and gentle as the falling leaves of Autumn! Well done trell11, a most worthy piece for the Spotlight!
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Re: My leaves of Autumn

Post by platinummoon » May 25th, 2013, 6:16 am

everhopeful wrote:A very skillfully crafted extended metaphor between leaves and human life, this is done with subtlety and a committment to the metaphor until the end which makes many people read it in a very direct, straightforward way, yet upon consideration the parallels with human existence are all apparent. The final stanza, the 're-birth', shows how we can leave our mark on the world long beyond our mortality.
Congratulations on the spotlight.
Excellent poetry. I second the above review by evrhopeful.Bravo



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