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sparky21737
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Dreaming of Existing - Palindrome
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by sparky21737 » April 25th, 2017, 8:54 pm
Dreaming
Asleep I am
Or am I awake?
Night is quiet and still
Shadows lengthen and form stars
Spiraling, spiraling, spiraling
Breathing
Alive I am
Or am I dead?
Morning is coming
I will wake, won’t I?
Waiting, waiting, waiting
I do exist, don’t I?
Questioning, always, questioning
Asleep, awake, alive, dead
Dead, alive, awake, asleep
Questioning, always, questioning
I don’t exist do I?
Waiting, waiting, waiting
I won’t wake will I?
Coming is morning
Dead I am
Or am I alive?
Breathing
Spiraling, spiraling, spiraling
Stars form and lengthen shadows
Still and quiet is night
Awake I am
Or am I asleep?
Dreaming
Happiness can be found even in the darkest of times, if one only remembers to turn on the light ~ Albus Dumbledore
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entwife - Elite Member
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by entwife » April 26th, 2017, 11:15 am
very nice. this is a hard form to make work, great job.
"I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing than to teach ten thousand stars how not to dance" e.e. cummings
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by INFPoet » April 27th, 2017, 12:35 am
This is INTRIGUING!!! Well done, my friend (and comrade in the LP Wars)!
~INFPoet
Home is behind, the world ahead,
And there are many paths to tread
Through shadows to the edge of night,
Until the stars are all alight...
(J.R.R. Tolkien, LOTR)
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by Alan » April 30th, 2017, 12:55 am
Nice stuff! :D
Palindromes are always really fun to make since - at least in the way I do it - you start with a simple idea on the 'pivot' and then you expand and expand on it. The content revolving around questioning works great for that. Also liked the creative use of punctuation to make the palindrome lines work.
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astroannie
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by astroannie » May 8th, 2017, 9:33 pm
wow! I'm glad I clicked on this. Thank you for sharing with us. It's very well-penned. I especially like stars and shadows juxtaposing. Again, wow!
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by SilentTears » October 19th, 2017, 9:55 pm
Love this, love the concept, love the topic. It has this sort of ethereal, dreamy, half-remembered quality I really enjoy. Well deserved and well done Sparky!
-Muse of Tears
I let the sun on my skin.
Pretend I don't burn
I'm not burning here.
I just lay ash
On my eyelids,
And rub it deep into my
Bones.
6x winner of:
My Poet File
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Josie
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by Josie » October 22nd, 2017, 9:16 pm
Congratulations on the spotlight recognition. I must admit I felt my head was spinning going back and forth. I can tell you had fun writing this.
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hidekazu inoue
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by hidekazu inoue » October 23rd, 2017, 4:48 am
Hi！:Sparky
This poem is the origin of Saussure's structural linguistics.sinifant "meaning" and signifié"meaningful" are left to the creativity of the reader.
Thank you for a wonderful work.
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hidekazu inoue
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by hidekazu inoue » October 23rd, 2017, 8:47 am
hidekazu inoue wrote: ↑October 23rd, 2017, 4:48 am
Hi！:Sparky
This poem is the origin of Saussure's structural linguistics.sinifant "meaning" and signifié"meaningful" are left to the creativity of the reader.
Thank you for a wonderful work.
Yes,this is nice poem style for palindrome.
one more i enjoyed.
