The distance from here to spring
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Lovely word choices in this make it a wonderful poem to read and enjoy. Nice metaphor running through it too. Thanks for sharing it. Loved it.
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Re: The distance from here to spring
Beautifully described imagery and powerful seasonal contrasts; skillful use of language and much enjoyed.
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Re: The distance from here to spring
Very nice, the detail really reels one in with its previously stated use of language and placement. A gorgeously penned write and I love those last two lines mirroring almost a bit forlornly, and beautiful all the while.
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Re: The distance from here to spring
"The crunch of a hungry squirrel that struggles to gather the last nut before the nightly snowfall" Such a fantastic sensory line to bring the poem together. I could smell the cold and hear the leaves. I also love the "thirsty wild."
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Brilliant imagery. :) This was simply lovely and the emotional undercurrent surfaced at the end. Very nice job! :)
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Brilliant imagery. :) This was simply lovely and the emotional undercurrent surfaced at the end. Very nice job! :)
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Re: The distance from here to spring
Beautiful write, and that last line really brings it home. Well done!
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