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Mother

Post by David Wayne » September 22nd, 2014, 5:55 am

Sometimes I hear
your voice calling me home
and I feel your fingers in my hair
but your face always escapes me.

You died so long ago
but I'm still here
like I promised.

Tonight your son isn't doing so well.

Maybe tomorrow
I will hear your voice
and find the courage
to come home
and see your face
one more time.
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Post by Balustrade » September 22nd, 2014, 6:07 am

As loving as this is, there is tragic sadness embedded beneath the words. Chilling as much as it is heartwarming.


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Post by AuroraRayne » September 22nd, 2014, 9:03 am

Wow. Captures the moments of tragedy, but in essence we must all face death. Very spiritual as well, and great seeing a bond between mother and son like this.


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Post by candlewitch » September 22nd, 2014, 12:57 pm

hello my friend,

the bond between mother and son is there, even in death. I know it is there between my father and me, even though he has passed many years ago. and yet there is longing. a very fine poem!

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Post by fledgling » September 22nd, 2014, 2:12 pm

This poem practically made me cry. I just lost my Aunt this week and there is a lot of sorrow in my heart. I thought this was beautifully written. I too agree it shows a strong bond between a child and their mother. Very well done.


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Post by things_i_wrote » September 22nd, 2014, 2:44 pm

that was mother nostalgia poem with sadness behind the words and some real love kept in
the heart of the speaker

TIME CAN'T ERASE EVERYTHING !

nicely written

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Post by cherryl » September 22nd, 2014, 2:51 pm

That brought tears to my eyes. So much feeling and depth to the simple few words use. Very nicely done.
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Re: Mother

Post by ladylynnmary » September 22nd, 2014, 4:54 pm

Dearest David Wayne, this brought tears to my eyes as well. Though the bond was strong you had to face the reality that
mom was gone. Beautiful and sad. Thank you for sharing this.

Much Love,
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Re: Mother

Post by Mike6 » September 22nd, 2014, 7:06 pm

There is power in the love behind this poem, but w/ this love also comes a deep sadness. Profound work. Very raw poem w/ a strong emotive quality. Thanks for sharing.



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Re: Mother

Post by David Wayne » September 25th, 2014, 12:16 pm

I want to thank everyone who replied to this poem. Wasn't sure how it would come across so I am thankful for all of your kind replies.

David



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Post by dwells » September 26th, 2014, 12:47 am

Aw DW, sweetly and sorrowfully stated and wondering if I'll have a spirit guide now? Hoping all is OK and that this is just a tender moment of quiet reflection. Be well and hang in their my friend, cheers!


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Re: Mother

Post by David Wayne » September 28th, 2014, 3:33 pm

dwells wrote:Aw DW, sweetly and sorrowfully stated and wondering if I'll have a spirit guide now? Hoping all is OK and that this is just a tender moment of quiet reflection. Be well and hang in their my friend, cheers!

Thanks for the reply dwells

not to worry

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Re: Mother

Post by DreamerSeeker » November 11th, 2014, 7:43 pm

I love this, beautifully written. Always remember to keep your head up and stay positive! :)


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Re: Mother

Post by rupertpupkin » February 2nd, 2022, 3:20 am

Beautifully sad piece. Well done on a most deserving spotlight. Loved it.


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Re: Mother

Post by eploscik » February 8th, 2022, 2:10 pm

Thank you for the poem. It was short, sweet and to the point and captured emotions beautifully. Thank you



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