conquering guilt

[Michellanjello]

franticly feel with the fangs of your fingers
you callously claw out and capture the creatures
that burrow beneath the beatings of your heart,
holding hostage the little love you have left.

[JASON]

solid ending line.
The alliteration worked here...good job.

[Baywriter]

I agree. A very strong ending. Guilt is a hard feeling to live with. The way you described it makes it sound like a monster, and I think that's a good comparison. It conquers every aspect of your life if it's deep enough. Nicely written with good attention to sound. I liked 'burrow beneath the beatings.' Thank you for sharing!

Bay

[bekah22]

Guilt is a horrible feeling to live with. This was a way of describing it that i have nevr heard, qnd it is spot on! Very well done

[MBW]

Strong alliteration game, bro. That imagery, I agree, is very original - the creatures in the heart holding hostage love. Guilt can obscure love, but hopefully love takes the foreground.

[escorial]

powerful short piece................

[inflames]

This is awesome. Really powerful. Congrats on your spotlight!

[up2quark]

Strong images that apply themself in the worse of times.

[jsol]

I liked this one a lot. Really I agree with everything that has already been said. I like the "fangs of your fingers," a very cool image.

[AM616]

I applaud your ability to write a short yet still powerful piece. I loved it. The metaphorical imagery was spot on and lovely. Thanks for sharing.

[shays1]

Deserved spotlight. Profound description of feelings encountered in life. The alliteration you used so skillfully set a pulse to the read, which highlighted its pace.