Baby Blue Jay

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Baby Blue Jay

Post by Inspiration_ » May 7th, 2015, 10:31 pm

Once upon a springtime day
Out of a speckled egg came an infant blue jay
Mother bird was overwhelmed with pride
But soon inspected her baby and began to cry

“Where are your wings my dearest child?”
Mother blue jay reviled
“Mother I do not have the wings you so desire”
Baby blue jay said with a heart of fire

“Fly my child up towards the heavenly sky”
Mother bird replied
“But mother I can’t I have not the wings to fly”
Baby blue jay quivered with wide eyes

“Why is it I that has to soar through the sun and moon
While you lay recumbent in your snug cocoon?”
Mother blue jay declared with pulsing veins
The violet channels of her sickly brain

“Mother I am not like you I cannot fly
Why can’t you understand mother, oh why?”
The baby blue jay leapt and flailed
But ultimately she did nothing but fail

Clack, clack, clack
Mother bird pecked at baby bird ‘til her brain bled black
“Farewell my worthless child”
Mother bird sat content with a smile

But soon contempt found its way back to her face
“Child why do you lay dead while there are worms to chase?
Why am I left in solitude to fend for myself
While you reside in blood only worried for yourself?”

And so mother bird sang with sorrow
A song so melancholy it seeped into the yarrows
But this song was not for the death of her baby blue jay
It was for herself, and her struggle through the day



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Re: Baby Blue Jay

Post by Liddie » May 8th, 2015, 9:55 am

Hi Inspiration

This profoundly haunting! I love how the change in rhyme almost added a menacingly feel to the last few stanza's.

Naturally it brings to mind those who are the cause of their own misery, well done!



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Re: Baby Blue Jay

Post by Chelle » May 9th, 2015, 6:05 pm

tragedy of nature is often more than we comprehend in the name of evolution.


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Re: Baby Blue Jay

Post by ramfire » May 9th, 2015, 8:03 pm

A sad poem indeed. Poor baby bird with such a bad mother only thinking of herself.



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Re: Baby Blue Jay

Post by inflames » May 12th, 2015, 12:52 pm

This is terribly sad, but a very interesting and unique poem. Congrats on your spotlight!


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Re: Baby Blue Jay

Post by Windsend » May 14th, 2015, 12:20 am

Great wording and rhymes. You pulled off a dark situation in a very light environment with this poem. Hard to do.


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Re: Baby Blue Jay

Post by up2quark » May 16th, 2015, 2:08 am

Great poem, kinda felt the ending would end in death. Spelt a fantastic tale.



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