THE WALKING SAND

[Kornelia]

The walking sand
Of faded time
Hangs heavy
Over discented dawn
Rubies in the eyes of the skies
And the violet violence of cobwebed clouds
The skies of rubies
Dawn discented
Heavy hangs
Time

Faded in the walking sand

[SabyCs]

Thats a really nice read.Concise.
My favorite line -'Violent violence of cobwebbed clouds.'
Nice one.

[karrie]

The imagery in this popped. There is a heaviness about it that seems to add to the piece. Well done!

[interactivepoet]

such a wonderfully vivid picture you paint. The last two lines made for a strong ending to the overall theme.

[Kornelia]

THANK YOU much Saby, Karrie and Interactive....
I really appreciate your feedbacks, I am happy you enjoyed reading my poem and found some images that mean something to you.

Kornelia

[Legally Sane]

The walking sand of faded time is a really clever line. Very nice :)

[Kornelia]

Thank you much for your kind feedback, much appreciated, legally!

Kornelia

[maria colleen]

Your use of imagery was wonderful! Very nice write :)

[rupertpupkin]

Lovely writing. Some wonderful lines in there. Well done on a most deserving spotlight!

[WriterMinuit]

'Sand' was an intriguing chosen theme for me. It sent my imagination wild as to what this actually represented. To me sand is imagery of erosion- the abundance of waste of something that formerly existed in a different state. I suppose time indeed erodes memories into unrecognizable states.
Just shows how a really concise poem like this can launch the reader's mind into their own interpretation.
'Heavy hangs/ Time' Was my favourite phrase.
A well-deserved spotlight!

[inflames]

I like the repetition here. Congrats on your spotlight, Kornelia!

[pjmessimer1]

Like this style. Great imagery.

[Kornelia]

WOW I hardly know what to say, Im honored and happy, Im nominated for the TPS Spotlights forum!!!!
Thanks all for you great comments, shine on you crazy diamonds!
Greetings

Kornelia

[Kornelia]

'Sand' was an intriguing chosen theme for me. It sent my imagination wild as to what this actually represented. To me sand is imagery of erosion- the abundance of waste of something that formerly existed in a different state. I suppose time indeed erodes memories into unrecognizable states.
Just shows how a really concise poem like this can launch the reader's mind into their own interpretation.
'Heavy hangs/ Time' Was my favourite phrase.
A well-deserved spotlight!

Great to see you here, writerM....I find it a very uplifting comment from you.
The sand is a metaphor it tells the story of this poem

Kornelia

[Kornelia]

I like the repetition here. Congrats on your spotlight, Kornelia!

THANK YOU inflames,

[dwells]

The movement of sand, whether in the hourglass, on the sandbar, or in the sand dune - inexorable with the passage of time. Eroded all, as the earth reclaims her own Korny. The reds and purples here are reminiscent of an unspeakable brutality, cheers! - Dan (and congratulations on the Spotlight lady!)

[created2write]

Very descriptive, concise with a powerful impact. Well done. Peace, V

[Kornelia]

The movement of sand, whether in the hourglass, on the sandbar, or in the sand dune - inexorable with the passage of time. Eroded all, as the earth reclaims her own Korny. The reds and purples here are reminiscent of an unspeakable brutality, cheers! - Dan (and congratulations on the Spotlight lady!)

Indeed so, Dan, its about the movement of the sand, the cycle....
Thank you for your kind comments, sir

[Kornelia]

And thank you V, for stopping by