My Life

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Liquid Bear
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My Life

Post by Liquid Bear » July 16th, 2016, 5:27 am

My life grows anxiously
like a flower thirsting for air
in a hell made of thorns

Without pride it invites the sun
to nourish its tired
and barren roots

Sometimes a raindrop
lulls to sleep the ferocity
of the endless hours

How long will the sad flower
resist beneath the unfeeling sky?


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"I cry out for magic/I feel it dancing in the light/It was cold/Lost my hold/To the shadows of the night" (Ronnie James Dio)

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Re: My Life

Post by Jim » July 16th, 2016, 12:50 pm

So much said, such intense emotion, in this seemingly simple piece that hit me to the core like a sledgehammer.
Spotlight worthy in my opinion.
Many bows


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Re: My Life

Post by Ona Sabela » July 17th, 2016, 8:45 pm

Time wears on..
Let's hope some sunlight and rain makes it's way past the thorns.


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Re: My Life

Post by Liquid Bear » July 19th, 2016, 2:53 pm

Thank you both very much, I'm moved :)

Bear


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"I cry out for magic/I feel it dancing in the light/It was cold/Lost my hold/To the shadows of the night" (Ronnie James Dio)

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Re: My Life

Post by Versus » July 25th, 2016, 2:53 pm

Your feeling are deep and sincere, yet in the film Equilibrium feeling are the biggest enemy of a civilized society. But if there is someone who defies and even defeats this cold ideology with touching sorrow and beauty, it is you.


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Re: My Life

Post by jsol » July 25th, 2016, 10:34 pm

i am so glad to stumble upon your poem(s). i'm not sure if i just missed reading you somehow or what...?? but i am always happy to see words come to life. you write you and in doing so you find our common world. in my view, this is the basis of poetry. keep writing pls and thanks.



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Re: My Life

Post by BarryC » August 1st, 2016, 4:11 am

superb piece deserves the spotlight.



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Re: My Life

Post by tangerinepie » August 4th, 2016, 1:38 pm

fabulous write, written in elegant style.The third stanza amazed me with it's aptness.An inspiring spotlight choice..Tangie..


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Re: My Life

Post by Liquid Bear » February 24th, 2017, 7:16 pm

Oh, I can't even believe I didn't know this had been granted the Spotlight. Thank you all so much! I'm honestly touched. As always, I didn't even expect it to garner such praise. Very happy and humbled :)

Bear


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"I cry out for magic/I feel it dancing in the light/It was cold/Lost my hold/To the shadows of the night" (Ronnie James Dio)

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