I wanted to be a spider,
so I grew extra legs and made myself a web.
You said flies wouldn’t stick to grandma’s wool;
I came down from my corner.
I wanted to be a ferocious lion,
so I ruffled up my fur and prowled for my prey.
You said the front room rug was sheepskin;
I sheared myself.
I planned a dangerous expedition,
pitched my tent on a snowy mountain side.
You said if I got the sheet dirty you would smack me;
I left camp, crying.
She wanted to be a ballerina,
turning on tiptoes she danced with her hands.
I said we need net curtains and pink socks for ballet shoes;
The critics gave us rave reviews.
I can't imagine why
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Re: I can't imagine why
Ha! A bit of resentment here for little sister's success nontheless, an important part of it. I hope the speaker was able to fill his or her creative aspirations after leaving the nest. Nice read.
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Re: I can't imagine why
This is wonderful. Love the title. It is wonderfully layered. A sense of irony in the tone and how it plays with the idea of imagination. The final stanza melts my heart.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Mirthy
Thanks so much for sharing.
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Re: I can't imagine why
Thank you reading and commenting shays1 much appreciated Keithshays1 wrote:Ha! A bit of resentment here for little sister's success nontheless, an important part of it. I hope the speaker was able to fill his or her creative aspirations after leaving the nest. Nice read.
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Many thanks allmirth very please the poem came across this way. Best Keithallmirth wrote:This is wonderful. Love the title. It is wonderfully layered. A sense of irony in the tone and how it plays with the idea of imagination. The final stanza melts my heart.
Thanks so much for sharing.
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Re: I can't imagine why
Kind of really funny. Enjoyed it much and I found it rather heartwarming. Wanna get older again.
She told me to live.
Speak of the lonely.
Time is an invitation.
Speak of the lonely.
Time is an invitation.
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Re: I can't imagine why
Thank you free preacher I'm happy you enjoyed it, best keith.freepreacher wrote:Kind of really funny. Enjoyed it much and I found it rather heartwarming. Wanna get older again.
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Re: I can't imagine why
Isn't it odd? The things we remember about our siblings, our family, and our childhood? This is a entertaining write and well deserves the Spotlight. Congrats.
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