NPM Spotlight 4/2/18 Betrayal (sonnet)

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NPM Spotlight 4/2/18 Betrayal (sonnet)

Post by Balustrade » October 11th, 2017, 3:30 am

There surely is a war that rages hard
Within the folds of brain inside my mind
Both matter gray and matter white are marred
With splotches red and deep crimson combined

There surely are casualties that fell
Already in the heated bloody round
A first with promise of subsequent hell
To follow until gloom and doom are crowned

It needs no skill to fully understand
The reason Whats and Whys and Wheres and Hows
And Whens have all amply taken command
To fight: Betrayal’s tough back then and now

Though I perceive we’re firm in love, in bliss
Love casts a blindfold from that hot first kiss

Last edited by Alan on April 2nd, 2018, 5:38 am, edited 2 times in total.
Reason: forgot to change the date


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Post by Jerryk » October 11th, 2017, 8:08 am

Hi Balustrade;
yours is a powerful poem; well rhymed and to the point. Excellent write; nothing more needs to be said. Take care,
Jerryk


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Re: Betrayal

Post by Ladywildalice » October 11th, 2017, 1:53 pm

Indeed, my friend, betrayal can take many forms. Between lovers, between spouses, between friends, and between muses and artistic hearts. Lovely write. I have missed reading your words and look forward to seeing more now that I am back on TPS. Blessings.


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Post by dwells » October 14th, 2017, 9:00 pm

A closing that cannot be denied by any who have love and lost; only to lose again, with an occasional role reversal thrown into the mix for good measure. Pleasure to read you again my friend - cheers! - Dan


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Post by tangerinepie » November 7th, 2017, 9:25 pm

A wondrous foray into the complexities we face, relationships that are never quite what they seem, and the turmoil of figuring it all out.The second verse is really stunning, poetically it tells a whole story...memorable...Tangie..


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Post by Philip16 » November 13th, 2017, 3:06 pm

That dratted blindfold. Relate! The battle of reason with instinct in the arena of the
white and gray matter provides endless entertainment and drama!


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Re: Betrayal

Post by Balustrade » November 27th, 2017, 4:54 am

Thank you lovely people, from the bottom depths of my burdened heart!


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Post by jainrohit » December 6th, 2017, 11:06 pm

Yeah i agree betrayal is very tough to digest, especially with those people who lacked company, then found company and then subsequently got a betrayal. What i liked most in the poem is that you have successfully captured [in wonderful rhyme and rhythm], numerous aspects of the post betrayal stage that a person goes through. The underlying rage is best explained and painted with the use of words like 'Crimson- Red' etc. Since it is going on in your mind, you also have the liberty to do what you can :) ... I liked this poem a lot !!


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Post by AgentofChaos » January 21st, 2018, 5:23 am

indeed a powerful, deeply emotive piece of writing, summed up with all its intensity in the couplet


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Post by dwells » March 24th, 2018, 12:28 pm

I returned to this worthy sonnet (just noted in the title); for another bite of the crushing closing that keeps getting better with every read. Hot cheers my friend Bal! - Dan


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Re: NPM Spotlight 4/2/18 Betrayal (sonnet)

Post by godsplat » April 4th, 2018, 2:34 am

Hello Balustrade

I love a good sonnet and this is far and beyond good, it is great, I love the ending, powerful!

Congrats on the spotlight


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