NPM Spotlight 4/15/2018 - Disillusion.

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NPM Spotlight 4/15/2018 - Disillusion.

Post by S(OU)LAR » March 7th, 2018, 7:36 am

When you see
there's no eternity
love overflows

With tears
like the sea

--- Who's breathing?

Request I receive,
I return it with love.

Working inside and out,
just what it is, all about.

--- Quite possibly.

I like to hide in music
and fully be revealed.

--- No mind, or never mind.

I had a talk over the phone and realized
that talking is vibration like singing



[INTERLUDE]



--- All the time

Where to or from, then, what really comes and goes
Who is it, are you... Now stays as the rest unfolds
Last edited by S(OU)LAR on April 8th, 2018, 10:03 am, edited 3 times in total.


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Re: Disillusion.

Post by aoeclald » April 5th, 2018, 12:31 am

A lot of very interesting plays with juxtaposition here, SOULAR. I like how each stanza comes with a piece of enlightenment, only to be followed with a sort of punch line that leads us into a new topic altogether. Very cool "quilted" style bringing a lot of interesting images and topics into play.

Thanks for sharing,
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Re: Disillusion.

Post by S(OU)LAR » April 6th, 2018, 11:30 am

Thanks very much for comment, Luke.


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Re: Disillusion.

Post by The ghost » April 8th, 2018, 2:13 pm

I like the stream of consciousness style this is written in.
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Re: Disillusion.

Post by jainrohit » April 10th, 2018, 6:30 pm

Re: First 5 lines

Agree. Completely agree. was watching a sci fi series named Altered carbon the other day where the lead character speaks as to how a 300 year life becomes boring enough for a person to live. The first 5 lines exactly word similar thoughts, albeit in a different manner. Finiteness of life makes us cautious enough to live it with dignity.

These lines indicate that may be even a date is known, that is why the overflowing of love. But clothing them in tears adds a new dimension altogether which makes these very interesting to read...

Re: request i receive

The fact that even the person is unaware about what the request is all about is quite ironical. And this irony adds to the feel of these lines.

The last 2 couplets also carry a similar quality. As commented by Aoeclad as well, i also found this quilted style very interesting. You have managed to put a lot of things into a single one. Thanks for sharing.


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Re: Disillusion.

Post by S(OU)LAR » April 12th, 2018, 8:39 am

Thanks much for your comment, jainrohit! Quilted style sounds good to me but a tactual one, I'd add.


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