8 Months and 1 Hour

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mkarger
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8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by mkarger » April 14th, 2021, 5:16 am

Remember everything
In the dark
While you bathe

Remember the whistle of the wind on the pier
Remember the sunset

Stray from the light
Down the shore into the night
Ocean spray tickles your face

Remember what she told you before she left
Forever, again and again
Down the corridor
Dark and dim

“I could have been a better mother”
“I’m proud of you”

She died with one eye open



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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by Michaelwg3 » April 16th, 2021, 10:17 pm

Loved "Stray from the light, Down the shore into the night". I felt the intensity of the rest of your poem but did not understand. An interesting read.



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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by Mr D » April 21st, 2021, 2:00 pm

Great read, im sorry for your pain.
D



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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by mkarger » April 28th, 2021, 5:48 am

Mr D wrote:
April 21st, 2021, 2:00 pm
Great read, im sorry for your pain.
D
Thank you :heart:



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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by mkarger » April 28th, 2021, 5:49 am

Michaelwg3 wrote:
April 16th, 2021, 10:17 pm
Loved "Stray from the light, Down the shore into the night". I felt the intensity of the rest of your poem but did not understand. An interesting read.
Thanks. It's about the passing of my mom from a terminal illness.



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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by jwesley » April 28th, 2021, 10:29 pm

My heart beats for you my friend. It's never easy to be the one left behind.

j.



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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by rupertpupkin » February 2nd, 2022, 3:17 am

"Down the corridor
dark and dim". Wonderful.
Well deserved spotlight. Well done with this fine poem.


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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour

Post by mkarger » February 7th, 2022, 5:51 am

rupertpupkin wrote:
February 2nd, 2022, 3:17 am
"Down the corridor
dark and dim". Wonderful.
Well deserved spotlight. Well done with this fine poem.
Thank you ❤️



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