Remember everything
In the dark
While you bathe
Remember the whistle of the wind on the pier
Remember the sunset
Stray from the light
Down the shore into the night
Ocean spray tickles your face
Remember what she told you before she left
Forever, again and again
Down the corridor
Dark and dim
“I could have been a better mother”
“I’m proud of you”
She died with one eye open
8 Months and 1 Hour
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Loved "Stray from the light, Down the shore into the night". I felt the intensity of the rest of your poem but did not understand. An interesting read.
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Thanks. It's about the passing of my mom from a terminal illness.Michaelwg3 wrote: ↑April 16th, 2021, 10:17 pmLoved "Stray from the light, Down the shore into the night". I felt the intensity of the rest of your poem but did not understand. An interesting read.
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My heart beats for you my friend. It's never easy to be the one left behind.
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Re: 8 Months and 1 Hour
"Down the corridor
dark and dim". Wonderful.
Well deserved spotlight. Well done with this fine poem.
dark and dim". Wonderful.
Well deserved spotlight. Well done with this fine poem.
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Thank yourupertpupkin wrote: ↑February 2nd, 2022, 3:17 am"Down the corridor
dark and dim". Wonderful.
Well deserved spotlight. Well done with this fine poem.