Water and a Flame

Post by **Patdolan83** » September 15th, 2012, 6:32 pm

We couldn't have been better suited, that was my belieF
A mistake in judgment I now truly feeL
There is now a longing for temporary amnesiA
Every memory I want erasing along with every dreaM
Realising we could never be..Youre water and I'm a flamE

just something I was messing around with

Post by **Dew** » September 15th, 2012, 7:45 pm

Awesome acrostic (double acrostic? acrostic sandwich?) and it's always a wonderful treat when the content is marvelous too! - Dew

Post by **JingleBelle** » September 15th, 2012, 8:32 pm

Acrostic sandwich is the perfect name for this! This is fantastic, and none of it felt forced.

Flower of Poetic Excellence

Post by **Sasha** » September 16th, 2012, 3:12 am

You know, I don't know how that might sound, but I really felt the coldness and heat at both edges, as they are completely two different things, and you presented your thoughts in quite a clever way.
Impressive!

Sash

Post by **queenjellybean** » September 30th, 2012, 3:03 am

This was really cool. I love the contrast, and the rationalizing of things. Cool piece!

Post by **Lonnie** » September 30th, 2012, 7:58 pm

Cleverly crafted and interestingly themed! This is one to read again and again! Thank you!

Post by **inflames** » October 14th, 2012, 12:49 pm

This is really cool. Very neat work! Congrats on your spotlight!

Post by **Patdolan83** » October 14th, 2012, 3:58 pm

Thanks guys...never expected the spotlight

Post by **dornicks** » October 15th, 2012, 3:50 pm

Much enjoyed and deserving of the spotlight. Good luck to you,

dornicks

Post by **Patdolan83** » October 16th, 2012, 7:56 pm

Thank you dornicks, I apreciate your kind words

Post by **nortan223** » October 17th, 2012, 11:33 am

I wish I could "just mess around" with writing so effectively. The double acrostic was a brilliant device that didn't "overpower" the concepts of the poem.
Congratulations on getting a Spotlight.

--Norman--

Post by **tangerinepie** » October 17th, 2012, 12:22 pm

I really enjoy acrostic writing, so this was a treat.The mood created had a natural flow, perfect contrasts.A well deserved spotlight selection..T..

Post by **Jahaliel** » October 18th, 2012, 3:23 am

Double acrostics are amazing and this works so well. Congrats on the Spotlight.

Post by **everhopeful** » October 18th, 2012, 9:15 am

A double acrostic, nicely penned in a way which emphasised the contrasting nature of the acrostic words, on a theme which is made for such an approach. Excellent presentation and a cool idea to boot.
Congratulations on the spotlight!

Post by **musie** » October 19th, 2012, 7:54 am

WoW! An excellent double Acrostic...Very creative and made for a delightful read....Well done and Congrat's on the Spotlight...most deserved....Musie

Post by **Sasha** » October 19th, 2012, 10:49 am

So nice to see this glowing under the Spotlight! Congrats!
Cool, clever work!

Sash

Post by **Patdolan83** » October 19th, 2012, 5:30 pm

You kind people could never know just how much your words mean to me, thank you all from the middle of my heart, and thanks to the moderators for choosing my write for the spotlight

Post by **candlewitch** » October 21st, 2012, 9:42 am

hello,

very creative double acrostic! I can relate to the theme very well. Much thought went into this piece. My favorite line:

Realising we could never be..Youre water and I'm a flamE

exquisitely done!

always, Cat

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