My Hell

[TheRaven97]

Beautiful in every way
Roses once lovely now wilted
I look alive to the naked eye
Inside I'm far beyond the grave
I've begun my yearning for death
The chorus is all I beg:
"Ashes to ashes, dust to dust"
For cerement's cold embrace, I lust
A dream wrapped in miasmal whispers
Bleeding the fog from my wrists
Right through the cracks, I have fallen
White wings turned to blackened bone
"Welcome to hell, welcome home"
My demons whisper when I lay me down to sleep
And never find worth in the words
"I pray the lord, my soul to keep"

[bandgeekfreak]

This took me a couple reads to get all the meanings but really great piece, really deep.

[dwells]

Striking ending here TR97 and may the rest of the prayer give you some peace and consolation, cheers and blessings!

[allmirth]

The stark and cold imagery brings a chill to this reader, leaving me with such a desolate feeling.

Thanks much for sharing.
Mirthy

[AM616]

It gave me chills. Its haunting and tragic. The use of imagery was fantastic. The more times you read it the better it becomes because you understand more. Thanks for sharing.

[TheDamsel]

Hauntingly beautiful. Well constructed, like the ending especially.

[sparky21737]

This was a chilling read with beautifully constructed imagery. My favourite line was 'white wings turned to blackened bone' as it gave me the image of a fallen angel. Thanks for sharing

Sparky

[Antigone]

Thank you for sharing this. I agree with the others. Powerful, haunting, and chilling. A job very well done.

[BuddingFlower]

"My demons whisper... And never find worth in the words" - Wow. This poem conveys so much hurt and misery, very well done.

[things_i_wrote]

"welcome hell welcome home" misery thinking

good poem and these are my favorite piece

Roses once lovely now wilted
I look alive to the naked eye
Inside I'm far beyond the grave
I've begun my yearning for death

so deep thanks for sharing

cheers...TIW

[Josie]

To be alive and wish to be in hell must be excruciating for Narrator and others who have lost hope. Congratulations on the TPS Spotlight

[rupertpupkin]

Very nice write. Well done on the spotlight.

[Cedeines]

Great piece, very well wrote.

[jsol]

i agree wholeheartedly with my previous commenters. this is a well-written, hard-hitting piece.

[Mollie]

This is a very moving poem with poignant imagery. I have read it many times. Such sadness, such rejection you feel. Thank you for sharing.