She Oft Brought Blooms

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She Oft Brought Blooms

Post by Philip16 » July 3rd, 2012, 1:49 pm

She Oft Brought Blooms

She oft brought blooms to 'dorn the stone,
Love still lives though stilled the bones,
Kneeling, gnarled, soft prayers she sheds,
Whispered pleas to raise the dead.

A fleshly hand proffered now,
Visage of a handsome brow,
Breath soft blown across her cheek,
Any, all, she'd gladly greet.

Black silence blankets those engraved,
Shrouds so thick a cavalcade
Of angels ought not penetrate,
Blooms released, in tears are vased.

Years ago, not far from here,
Shared these two a life of cheer,
Fancy feelings filled their days,
Not far from here, yet far away.

She lifts a finger to the stone,
Traces there the love she'd known,
Feels how hard that time can make
A gentle kiss or soft embrace.

The gardener happens by, and stops,
Lifts her up, her brow he mops,
His hands seem pierced, she lets grief go,
Head 'gainst his chest, she hears...and knows.


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Re: She Oft Brought Blooms

Post by SwingingPistol » July 3rd, 2012, 5:20 pm

First, congratulations on the spotlight! Such beauty in the way you wrote this.. I read it multiple times. Haven't read that many more poems as beautiful as this.

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Re: She Oft Brought Blooms

Post by karrie » September 6th, 2012, 7:10 am

This is sadly beautiful and quite touching.



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Re: She Oft Brought Blooms

Post by everhopeful » September 6th, 2012, 7:46 am

I love this poem, it is truly excellent in terms of form and content. Although a very emotional piece, it doesn't play the trump card until the very end, and while the graveside scene is decorated beautifully, there's nothing quite as striking as the finale, seeing the lady in question finally move on.
Congratulations on the spotlight!



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Re: She Oft Brought Blooms

Post by Sasha » September 6th, 2012, 9:43 am

How beautiful!! Well, bittersweet as well, but I just love everything about this piece, the sesne of loss, love, tenderness were like a beautiful painful blend here! Amazing Job! and so worthy Spotlight!

Congrats!!

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Re: She Oft Brought Blooms

Post by JingleBelle » September 7th, 2012, 12:09 am

There is always something beautiful about a widow returning to her late husband's grave, but you, through your language, have given it an even greater beauty than that. I love your ending as well- love, like hope, springs eternal.


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