Pesierei the Unwanted

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Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by DomingoCarl » June 1st, 2012, 7:13 am

I
Unwilled, unseen a wretched birth
What will the spirit of the writ?
How wroth hath the spirit curs'd hearth
Of life unfear'd, of blight and spit

II
The mother call'th, wither'd footstool
Untrue conception cometh forth
Yet brighten'd wit, her life's a fool
The child conceived, unhappy north

III
Alas, the father wise yet ill
Of sorcery and darkly wit
Bore his mother the wreck so still
The witty candle hereby lit

IV
Whereas the child of good young age
Of whom no knowledge is kept from
His mother kill'd, an insane stage
His father of murd'rous chiefdom

V
Even his child he will to spill
His blood and the waiting cauldron
He goeth haste, a wasteful will
He is witness of this action

VI
From thence he walk'd till he besought
A place of good refuge and rest
Many a times ought men and sought
His wisdom better than the rest

VII
How terrible is he among
Not fate nor man will'd him their home
The curs'd abide, eternal song
Better the dead than his cold home.

Unknown Speech
The spirit of the writ- Fate personified
Hearth- Symbol of family and life
Blight and spit- Misfortunes
Wither'd Footstool- An illness, a disease, with disease
Untrue- Impossible
North- From where he dwells
To spill- To kill

Pronounciation
Pesierei (Peh'sheh-rah)


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Or whether twice again
In giving ye shall gain.


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Re: Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by QuietAstronomer » June 1st, 2012, 2:42 pm

Eerie and well done, DC.
Nice flow and very readable.

Thanks for sharing.


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Re: Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by DomingoCarl » June 2nd, 2012, 9:19 am

Thanks :happyy:


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The Blacksmith's Work

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Re: Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by SirDaniel » October 9th, 2012, 6:03 am

I'm, for whatever reason, picturing the movie "Damien" while reading this story about someone who just might be the signal for the end of times. Really enjoyed, best wishes.

~ Daniel



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Re: Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by up2quark » October 9th, 2012, 4:48 pm

Great story about the illness of what one becomes through turnmoil in there life. Greatly enjoyed the plane of higher writing you are on, it is nice to see delicate work proven and done correctly. Great write.



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Re: Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by Lonnie » October 10th, 2012, 10:02 am

Dark and somber, just the thing I enjoy reading! Well done!



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Re: Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by DomingoCarl » October 11th, 2012, 12:11 am

Thank you for the comments! :happyy:


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For every piece ye preach,
Or whether twice again
In giving ye shall gain.


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The Blacksmith's Work

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Re: Pesierei the Unwanted

Post by everhopeful » October 11th, 2012, 12:52 pm

I can only admire your commitment to form, meter and diction. The archaic style is a hard one to pull off with seeming like a parody, and this feels fully authentic from beginning to end.
Congratulations on the Spotlight!



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