Sea Storm (rhyming palindrome)

[Alan]

Form is to show how quickly nature can go from one thing to another thing
(I had actually written this about 2 years ago but decided to post it now due to the interest in palindromes (my favourite and speciality))


Flying or swimming flocks and herds
Defying gravity both fish and birds

Blue skies below or above clear seas
To and fro, dancing with ease

Slumbering seas with water lulling
Lumbering ships upon breezes dulling

Vapid Silence to violence rapid

Grumbling currents upon oceans scourging
Tumbling winds with sails surging

Crashing waves, frightening
Thrashing swells and lightening
Lightening and swells thrashing
Frightening waves crashing

Surging sails with winds tumbling
Scourging oceans upon currents grumbling

Rapid violence to silence vapid

Dulling breezes upon ships lumbering
Lulling water with seas slumbering

Ease with dancing, fro and to
Seas clear above or below skies blue

Bird and fish both gravity defying
Herds and flocks swimming or flying

~Alan

[Dew]

Lovely work...I loved how the tone started easy, built up, creshendoed, and then eased again...a palindrome in the poetic atmosphere....and I'm a sucker for rhyme. The interest in palindromes has always been around...just don't see as many of them. My favorite is "rapid violence" and "silence vapid"...really nice work building the palindrome form even into the inner rhymes within the line. A treasure! - dew

[ladylilith]

I applaud anyone that can make this form work, especially as well as this! It makes my head hurt just trying to think about how I would write one.. And the rhyme worked to great effect too! I thought the switch up, the turnover, was really clever, as suggested in your author's note, it does indeed show the changeable and also the power, methinks, that nature can wield! Nice work!

Lily^^

[kryptoean]

Commendable work. Have to agree with ladylilith. . the time taken would be too much for one not gifted to write in this style. Especially liked the turnover stanza, fitting. Thanks for sharing this gem!

[1freesoul]

Great musical flow and gifts the reader with power and passion in the rhyme and form,

[jeremyf]

A rhyming palindrome? Of this length? That really works? Wow I am really impressed that you took this difficult form head on and produced something so beautiful. This is incredible smart writing, enough to spark a bit of jealousy for your talented pen. Bravo.

[inflames]

I've never understood how to make these work, but it is simply spectacular when they are. Congrats on your spotlight! This is great.

[Lonnie]

Very nicely done,

The pattern is a tricky one and you seem to have captured it quite adequately! Bravo!

[karrie]

This is wonderful! Much enjoyed and congrats on the spotlight!

[SabyCs]

Pallindromes are simply Wow.And you Have given justice to it through this work of yours.Loved it.Really nice.

[Ladywildalice]

Delivered with style and read with enjoyment. Congratulation on the Spotlight. This is a fine example of a Palindrome and was fun to devour. Thanks again.

[riversidepoet]

This is really neat, one of the few forms I haven't tried, really liked it so much, so much so I decided to try my hand at it, the first one I wrote didn't rhyme , I thought that would be too hard, the second one I wrote I rhymed , thanks so much for sharing this with us, it inspired me to try something new, I appreciate you, it is really hard to do, I admire how well you wrote it, thanks again and may God bless

[Josie]

Alan,
You are quite the artist with words! Congratulations on the TPS Spotlight.

[BarryC]

a captivating piece-well done

[sparky21737]

Congrats on a well deserved spotlight. This is a truly awesome poem and everything about it is spotlight material

Sparky

[jsol]

seriously seriously seriously awesome!