Candle Blade

[Zojourn]

Candle Blade

A pirouette of light and shade
Personified your elegance…tantalizing the masses
Like an enigma dancing upon the flickering candle blade
You thwarted every Maiden and their reverberating lashes

Oh…how your divine touch of beauty prevailed
Every quill…ink-slipped upon their score
As mine scribed upon my heart…every lasting detail
And harnessed them within my core

The rapture upon essence and the flow of your dress
Emulated the capture of a heart in duress
Taking on conjecture and its theory to suggest
I disregarded the lecture and wholeheartedly submitted to test

Amid the commotion and the distance I had to part
Cruising through the up-coming studs and the warily content
I never lost sight of you; the Woman who held my heart
And although I may have tripped, I landed at your feet upon my descent

Assuredly I stood, composed, I ventured for your hand to dance
With surprising acceptance, I twirled you out of the abyss
Onto the stargazing ambiance of electrifying romance
And true love’s ultimate first kiss

Our internal Magick flourished upon the scene
Enveloping as a kernel with an indestructible spleen
Discovering an eternal measure of the serene
Never forgetting that infernal hurdle toward our unsanctified dream

~ Alonzo Sherrell

[allmirth]

The title is wonderfully evocative. I liked the imagery and the rhyme of this. Much enjoyed.

Thanks for sharing.
Mirthy

[candlewitch]

hello,

"wonderful" as Mirthy said! Being romantic at heart, I ate this up! I love a good love poem. What makes it good is that it isn't syrupy sweet or gushy! Loved these lines:

Assuredly I stood, composed, I ventured for your hand to dance
With surprising acceptance, I twirled you out of the abyss
Onto the stargazing ambiance of electrifying romance
And true love’s ultimate first kiss

always, Cat

[karrie]

I very much enjoyed reading this! Lovely write!

[Ladywildalice]

I must add my "Yes" to this one as well, Exceptional and much enjoyed. Thank you

[dwells]

Descent is the word I believe in the 4th stanza, but maybe not? Very much enjoyed the imagery here and may your dream become sanctified, cheers!

[Zojourn]

Thank you Mirthy, Cat, karrie, Lwa, and dwells for your generous comments and poetic support. It is much appreciated...and yes I did mean "descent" in the fourth stanza, thank you for pointing that out dwells.

~ Z

[Eggy]

Well done.

Words are the tools of the writer and you use them skilfully. This was an impressive piece. Love to see more of your work.

[songofmeadow]

An atmospheric and delightful poem, congratulations on the spotlight mx

[Dew]

Agree with all above...a magical effect on the reader! Something classic and comforting and something new and whimsical all at once! Great one for the spotlight! - dew

[dornicks]

Go to the top of the class ! This read so well and had a story to match. Deserving of the Spotlight,

dornicks

[rupertpupkin]

Hi, great piece of writing, which I enjoyed immensely. Well done on the spotlight, Sean.

[inflames]

Wow. The language in this is incredible. Congrats on a well deserved spotlight! :)

[allmirth]

Still wonderful. It gets better with every reading. So pleased to find this in the Spotlight!

Thanks much for sharing.
Mirthy

[Zojourn]

Thank you Eggy, som, Dew, dornicks, rp, inflames and Mirthy for your additional support. All of your comments meant the world to me.

~Z