"Hyalescent"
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I LOVED the rhymes with 'oubliette' (and the film reference...asssuming that's where you heard it from first ;)
Congrats on the spotlight you talented writer you! - dew
Congrats on the spotlight you talented writer you! - dew
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Re: "Hyalescent"
The tone and word choices make this piece sound like it was written in another era - castles, lords, ladies, medevial love and evil.
Also had me expanding my vocabulary - had to look up some words:
Hyaline: glassy or transparent
Oubliette: a secret dungeon with an opening only in the ceiling, as in certain old castles.
And as those who read this before me have already said - rich diction and rhyme.
Also had me expanding my vocabulary - had to look up some words:
Hyaline: glassy or transparent
Oubliette: a secret dungeon with an opening only in the ceiling, as in certain old castles.
And as those who read this before me have already said - rich diction and rhyme.
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Re: "Hyalescent"
The tone and word choices make this piece sound like it was written in another era - castles, lords, ladies, medevial love and evil.
Also had me expanding my vocabulary - had to look up some words:
Hyaline: glassy or transparent
Oubliette: a secret dungeon with an opening only in the ceiling, as in certain old castles.
And as those who commented before me have already said - rich diction and rhyme.
Also had me expanding my vocabulary - had to look up some words:
Hyaline: glassy or transparent
Oubliette: a secret dungeon with an opening only in the ceiling, as in certain old castles.
And as those who commented before me have already said - rich diction and rhyme.
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Re: "Hyalescent"
I want to just say how appreciative I am for this honor, and how your comments of support on this piece make my heart sing..Thank you all for your kindness..Tangie..
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The rationale of the guilty - the eye that alters, alters all... (unk). Too many pass down this same sad road, with shrines placed along the way for the memories lost - and the youthful lust for life betrayed. Cest magnifique! - cheers to you Tangie and feeling this deeply.
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I would choose that death means narrator's love for him is over or that narrator's moving out of that mental dungeon. An interesting thought is that looking up or moving up points to the only escape from the dungeon she is in. It is an excellent image of the pain one feels if the love of a relationship is one sided. Thank you for sharing and congrats on the TPS Spotlight. Oh, I love your choice of rhyming words.
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Hm I haven't commented on a poem like this in a while.. My only beef with your poetry tagnerpine while very elegant in presentation and what not is just trying to fully appreciate the poem in that the big words seem to dilute it a bit not that it's bad just skewed for me. Your poetry and diction is very unique in the way you present it and has almost a classical feel for me. As are your paintings I have seen...There layouts are very over the top and grand which seems to reflect in your poetry as well. Poetry defined
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unabridged excellence - brilliant work!!
By the way he obviously wasn't worth the heartache...
By the way he obviously wasn't worth the heartache...
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Again, thanks to all who have dropped by to comment.For those of you who understand my writing style, blessings to you, for I write as I write.LOL.
Jason..many thanks for taking time to read and comment.Tangie..
Jason..many thanks for taking time to read and comment.Tangie..
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Re: "Hyalescent"
Some amazing references here, Tangie. The imprisonment of despair is shown so forcibly in your choice of language. It's also surprising how effective the use of a single French expression can create a strength of image, that would require a whole phrase in English. Your vocabulary is as overwhelming as the darkness of the poem. Congratulations on your Spotlight.
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