Lodestones.
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There are too many rocks:
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]poems for poets,
hard, heavy, irregular rocks,
ersatz lumps that congeal around
bogus lightning bolts--
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]gratifying the vanity of poets.
Smooth stones please fingers,
find their way into pockets;
no one minds carrying their weight:
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]poems written to please.
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]Comprehensible poems
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]that slide easily into the mind.
Honest lightning, clear, direct
morphs rocks into lodestones
that attracts a soul's iron:
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]poems written for others,
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]selfless poems that speak
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]like a friend.
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]poems for poets,
hard, heavy, irregular rocks,
ersatz lumps that congeal around
bogus lightning bolts--
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]gratifying the vanity of poets.
Smooth stones please fingers,
find their way into pockets;
no one minds carrying their weight:
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]poems written to please.
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]Comprehensible poems
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]that slide easily into the mind.
Honest lightning, clear, direct
morphs rocks into lodestones
that attracts a soul's iron:
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]poems written for others,
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]selfless poems that speak
[space][/space][space][/space][space][/space]like a friend.
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Geoligical literature addresses various states and situations of existence in a logical, charged yet unemotional tapestry of word. From direct meaning to the more general moods, a wide spectrum of the human psyche is covered.
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This is wonderful writing, Flux. I'm totally won over by the imagery, and the structure too! I love what you did there, the italics give it this extra something that I can't quite articulate right now, but I loved it. The transformation of it, the meaning of the 'lodestones' as they become what they are.. wow... I'm not making any sense.
I really love this. Definitely one of my favourites from you.
Lily^^
I really love this. Definitely one of my favourites from you.
Lily^^
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lodestones....from inanimate objects to something that can convey a whole range of emotions, the perfect metaphor for our writing and how it develops.
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Natural magnets Flux and this was indeed epic with the attraction that pulls the reader into another place and discombobulates with simply stated beauty of underlying truth. Reminiscent,(at least for me) of A.E. Houseman's "With Rue My Heart is Laden", only in this case something almost spiritual for the devotees of poetry, cheers and thankyou!
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I read this yesterday, and put it on my mind to come back and comment :)
I just love the parallel structure you created between rocks and poems; I feel like the the stanzas that were written in italics were like a mirror to what preceded them, or as if you combined two poems in one (and yes, I kinda read it as well with italics alone and no italics alone, heh).
And I love this contrast, the similarities between a rock and a poem, their different types, and how they're received and accepted by the holders/readers - magnificent!
Enviable OM!
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I just love the parallel structure you created between rocks and poems; I feel like the the stanzas that were written in italics were like a mirror to what preceded them, or as if you combined two poems in one (and yes, I kinda read it as well with italics alone and no italics alone, heh).
And I love this contrast, the similarities between a rock and a poem, their different types, and how they're received and accepted by the holders/readers - magnificent!
Enviable OM!
Sash
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I feel like I understand what you are writing about or maybe your writing embodies my own experience. Regardless, this speaks to me.
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This is wonderful flux, and so deserving of the Spotlight. Congratulations for that. I know it is a small thing, but recognition for doing that which makes you feel alive is an awesome achievement. It doesn't happen often, and often it doesn't happen to some writers at all, but when it does, it changes us, even just a little. Thanks for this, it will lay upon my mind for some time to come, and whisper to me in the night "why can't you do that?". LOL Sue
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And among the many rocks there are gems
its great that the jewelers found this one to display!
its great that the jewelers found this one to display!
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Thanks for spotlighting this, appreciated, muchly.
And LadyWildalice, 'why can't you do that' you do. Sleep well, no more whispers.
And LadyWildalice, 'why can't you do that' you do. Sleep well, no more whispers.
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Brilliant word choices flux. Really enjoyed this one. Loved the concept, the metaphor and actually, everything about it. Well done on the spotlight, you deserve it mate, Sean.
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If I were to compare your work to a particular stone it would of course be a diamond. The metaphor shines with many facets and feels somehow personally addressed to each reader. A gem indeed! SFW
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The comparison which drives this poem works so well because the association between rocks and poems isn't one I'd ever find on my own, yet by the end of your poem I feel like it fits together perfectly. It was the penultimate stanza where it really clicked into place for me, and it put me in mind of some of the lodestone poems in my life which helped to bring me here.
Much admired work, congratulations on the spotlight!
Much admired work, congratulations on the spotlight!
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Love the rock references and the last verse just draws the reader closer. Well done sir and congratulations. peace