The lie that killed me
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Re: The lie that killed me
Thank you all so much!!I am absolutely honored to have my work featured in TPS Spotlight!
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This is really well crafted! each stanza holds the superb rise and fall unique to structured verse. The rhythm of this piece carried me through with ease. The tale itself is also a notable element. Well done and well written
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Suspenseful and gripping, with superb formatting that made it easy to read.A dark write that brings the unexpected conclusion to it even more shocking.Congrats on a brilliant spotlight choice..Tangie..
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A clever and skilled piece ,deserving of the spotlight. Congratulations,
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Absolutely awesome in every way; style, technique, rhythm and intensely profound. What a great read and thanks.
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Re: The lie that killed me
I think your poem really resonates with what some would call the
hero's journey. Something dies, something is sacrificed, in order
for the hero or humanity to reach a higher level of awareness. I
found your poem very appealing and thank you for sharing this.
Philip16
hero's journey. Something dies, something is sacrificed, in order
for the hero or humanity to reach a higher level of awareness. I
found your poem very appealing and thank you for sharing this.
Philip16
Remember, in order to facilitate community development, comment on 3 poems for every one that you post.
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Re: The lie that killed me
Multiple personalities and guessing the real you lies somewhere in-between maybe SG? A well-deserved Spotlight and strong message, "to thine own self be true..." - cheers!
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Re: The lie that killed me
Dramatic piece! That great ending made me take another look at my own "multiple personalities" :0)