Fall's Allegiance
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Autumn leaves dance in the wind
As its breath awakens the trees
The limbs tremble in defiance
As they try to resist the breeze
The trees shiver in the cool morning air
As the dew gives way to the frost
They know their armor will soon be gone
For all of their leaves will be lost
Winter stands ready to enter the stage
And for Autumn to relinquish its hold
It's time for Winter to abandon its slumber
And Autumn must welcome the cold
Winter demands Fall's allegiance
Like a General shouting commands
Autumn must follow its orders
For the time of change is at hand
Winter's cold winds show restraint
As Autumn surrenders in shame
The trees bow down in silence
With only Winter to blame
Winter takes its rightful place
'Til Spring revenges Fall's death
But Winter will battle until the end
'Til it breathes its final breath
As its breath awakens the trees
The limbs tremble in defiance
As they try to resist the breeze
The trees shiver in the cool morning air
As the dew gives way to the frost
They know their armor will soon be gone
For all of their leaves will be lost
Winter stands ready to enter the stage
And for Autumn to relinquish its hold
It's time for Winter to abandon its slumber
And Autumn must welcome the cold
Winter demands Fall's allegiance
Like a General shouting commands
Autumn must follow its orders
For the time of change is at hand
Winter's cold winds show restraint
As Autumn surrenders in shame
The trees bow down in silence
With only Winter to blame
Winter takes its rightful place
'Til Spring revenges Fall's death
But Winter will battle until the end
'Til it breathes its final breath
Whether a Gift or a Curse, We Write!
Thank you for your comments!
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Wow, whisk...this was just brilliant! I loved the olympian life you gave to the seasons! I was thoroughly enmeshed in your trap! Just amazed by what you conjured here...Dew
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Whiskie, this is a grand piece about my favorite season.
You have captured the sense of the season and given it a very artistic spin.
thanks for this brother.
QA
You have captured the sense of the season and given it a very artistic spin.
thanks for this brother.
QA
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Thanks again guys.....Whisk
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Thank you for your comments!
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Hi, I admire the progression of this, you follow the change of the seasons in an enjoyably creative way and it all flows together smoothly.
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I'm so bookmarking this stunning work and congratulate you on the well-deserved Spotlight!
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It's interesting how each season exists within the next. Like autumn persists even when winter has its icy grip on the landscape; a few brown leaves clinging to a branch or swirling in a dirt devil in a cold corner of a courtyard...they persist until spring sometimes when the change of season allows autumn's soul to rest finally.
well deserved spotlight...thanks for making me think, whisk
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well deserved spotlight...thanks for making me think, whisk
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Another beautiful write my friend! A lovely tour of the seasons. You have me looking towards fall already, I am more than happy to skip summer's heat. Congrats on the well deserved spotlight! -LMB xoxo
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I agree with previous comments whisk, you turn the change of seasons into a feature film here full of colourful imagery, well deserved on the spot, meadow
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Very beautiful piece, scripted by a very talented mind and most amiable muse indeed. Congrats on the spotlight. Very deserving indeed.
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Whisk, I think this is beautiful piece. The descriptions are so tender. wonderful work. Congrats on your spotlight!
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What I loved here was the beautiful imagery invoked by each stanza, as I felt Autumn's valiant fight against the encroaching Winter, only to submit in the end to the inevitable, as Winter will eventually be vanquished by the approach of Spring. I love poems that personify the seasons, and this is a real gem! Very well done, Whisk, my felicitations on this piece achieving its rightful place in the Spotlight.
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I really enjoyed reading this! Such a wonderful write! Congrats on the spotlight!!
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I believe you have a written a great way to express the changing of fall into winter.. a time I both dread and look forward too. Wonderful concept, enjoyed this alot.
~ Daniel
~ Daniel
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Whisk~I know I read this when you first posted it and could've sworn that I had replied....as Fall is my favorite time of the year, and any poetry written about it, truly touches my soul....and this was by far one of your best my friend...a true gem to read....Congrat's on the Spotlight my friend...Most deserving! Musie
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Thanks guys.....Whisk
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There was a steady beat playing in my head, as I read through. I could picture the seasons marching in time to nature's cadence. You did a brilliant job of shining new light on nature's undying cycle of seasons, by comparing it to war.
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The personification of elements of nature is always a pleasing element to any poem for me, and it helps to enhance the sense of battle between the seasons in this poem.
Congratulations on the spotlight.
Congratulations on the spotlight.