Struck bird

[albrightyo]

Struck bird

Silence speaks a loud voice,
Break down gentle in your shivering,
Icy Cold rivers run like the streams on my face,
Hands grown cold with this frost,
Pray for the fallen angel that I have lost,

Prairie Grass Brushes my dry ankles,
Twisting reality into surreal trips of sadness,
A small wind of whispers and sends word,
I am lost like an anxiety struck bird,

Fists clenched with frustration,
Swallows of Tar and fume,
The ever falling thoughts loom,

Dust and hot blood cake cracked knuckles,
Hot swelling rage boils deep in the lungs,
Excreting flaunting f--- fears,
All I ever wanted was you near.

[Dew]

<gasps> now I'm worried someone is going to get it...if they haven't already. This shows a dark side of affection...'if not mine then no ones!' if you take it that way. truly! harrowing...dew

[JASON]

definitely a trip to the dark side of affection...
well written - emotional,angry stuff.

[candlewitch]

hello,

definitely darkly disturbing! worthy of a little alliteration ;)

always, Cat

[Jaz]

Immediately from that first sentence you had my attention, right until that final dark verse and final word. Very wickedly fuelled words here, with a hint of mystery and perfect imagery thorough. Extremely well done. :)

[Windsend]

Struck bird

A small wind of whispers and sends word,

Hello, nice read. I particularly like this line. I had a player character on Everquest 2 a few years back. It's a MMORPG from Sony. My avatars name was 'Windsend Whispersongs'. I also used the name here for the TPS forums. If you have any connection to the game send me a PM.

[Elm46]

It definitely is easy to pick up on the kind of calm subtle anger that so willfully encouraged this poem. An angel lost is something that I too would seek in desperation.

[AM616]

This was fantastic. You couldn't help but feel the sadness and anger radiating from this individual's thoughts. I think people often forget that sadness and anger can go hand and hand. Lovely piece and thanks for sharing.

[AM616]

This was fantastic. You couldn't help but feel the sadness and anger radiating from this individual's thoughts. I think people often forget that sadness and anger can go hand and hand. Lovely piece and thanks for sharing.

[rupertpupkin]

Well done on a most deserving spotlight. Wonderful write. ( maybe needs a language warning)?