To Me
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To you, they are building blocks upon the floor,
Nothing less and nothing more.
To me they are fond stories and memories,
Constant friends and enemies.
To you it is a simple house on a quiet street,
A place to stay, a place to meet.
To me it was a home, where I was young
When life was easy, where life was fun.
To you it is just a silver chain,
Nothing special, simple and plain.
To me it is a portal to when she still drew breath,
When I was a child, and knew not of death.
To you it is an object that has no meaning
That invokes no memory, causes no feeling.
But to me it is what takes me home again
Where I can look back and get past my pain
A life can exist in a grain of sand,
In a loved ones photo or an outstretched hand.
It matters not what it means to you
For it is my feelings that make it true.
Nothing less and nothing more.
To me they are fond stories and memories,
Constant friends and enemies.
To you it is a simple house on a quiet street,
A place to stay, a place to meet.
To me it was a home, where I was young
When life was easy, where life was fun.
To you it is just a silver chain,
Nothing special, simple and plain.
To me it is a portal to when she still drew breath,
When I was a child, and knew not of death.
To you it is an object that has no meaning
That invokes no memory, causes no feeling.
But to me it is what takes me home again
Where I can look back and get past my pain
A life can exist in a grain of sand,
In a loved ones photo or an outstretched hand.
It matters not what it means to you
For it is my feelings that make it true.
Hey check out my latest poem, To Me
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Masterful. EXALT all over the place! The set up contrasts each stand alone as perfect poetry...the last stanza gives them universal significance...it is indeed your feelings that empower these things...and does so without fail! Wonderful! - dew
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Thank you Dew This piece means quite a bit to me, and Im glad you enjoyed it, best regards-lucivar
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Great poem Lucivar,
This should strike a chord with most readers,
Well penned sentimental piece......
Mick.
This should strike a chord with most readers,
Well penned sentimental piece......
Mick.
“Life is short, live it. Love is rare, grab it. Anger is bad, dump it. Fear is awful, face it. Memories are sweet, cherish it.” – Unknown
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Thank you mick, I appreciate that. I put a lot of emotions into this piece. Lucivar
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Beautiful job on this Gem Josh! Wondering if enemies can be as constant as friends (probably) - just a curious thought your words engendered. Strong finish with you closing definition that speaks to a universal truth. Funny the meanings and memories, attached to or invoked by certain things, on a personal level - cheers! - Dan
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Thanks dan, the reason I called the memories constant friends and enemies is because as they bring joyous feelings, they leave me longing for days that have since passed, thank you for you kind words, best regards-Josh
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Thanks Ram, This piece is very personal to me, as I still must occasionally look back and refocus. These pieces of my past, memories and mementos help drive me forward. Best regards Josh.
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Well written Josh and nice to make your acquaintance (me - victor). I know this is an angst piece, but it also works in the sadness section as well I do here believe. Such an intricate personal piece on many levels. I see you bared your heart out hear and in every stanza shows a part of your heart and your mind is completed with the last stanza. Well done. Much enjoyed the read, so thank you for sharing such a heartfelt piece of intimacy dealing with the interwoven workings of your life.
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Such a great ending to this poem, where the speaker finds the strength to stand up for his or her feelings no matter what the outcome to the "you" who seems to be sharing an important part of the speakers life. Good rhymes throughout ending with grandeur through minuscule, and firmness through kindness.
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I liked the strength pictured by the Narrator's words to trust her own thoughts and feelings and yet allow others to be true to who they are. The ending stanza was the extra glue to the earlier stanzas comparing the Narrator's way of thinking to another's point of view.