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Segregated

Post by Darkness » September 6th, 2014, 3:55 pm


Segregated


Trembling forth, as the eddies flow,
I walk the segregated row—
Turn eyes upon that sainted stone
Which sets before me like a throne.
A face etched in marble, so real,
Its fleshly form I long to feel;
But words that singe the soul beneath
Remind me of all men bequeath.

A funeral procession passes by,
Unseen by naked, mortal eye.
Spirits gathered unto this place
To view their newest, lifeless face.
And as the morning's dew drips past
This speck in time not meant to last,
Mournful cries touching not live ears
Reveal each drop as living tears...

...That bleed from the souls, one by one,
In our accomplishments undone.
...That tinge the breeze as it floats by
To darkness no man could descry.
...That echo through the hollow void,
Life after love long since destroyed.
A testament to hope extinguished
By forms before me so distinguished…

Stone statues in a flowered bed,
Here to commemorate the dead,
Draw emotion, bypassed while living,
Toward an end so unforgiving.
Among the specters stand I here,
No animosity—no fear.
But long for them to see me too,
That I, again, might stand next 'you.

As gold outlines the mountaintop,
Bringing spectral dance to a stop;
As day creeps upon me, unbade,
Watching visions of splendor fade...
I stand alone, to sift the dust
Of circumstance I dare not trust.
For all I know, in losing you,
By all accounts I am dead too.

But unseen by those gone afore,
While those who linger on ignore
My daily walk on shadowed path,
I play part in the aftermath.
A haunting, ever caught between
This world and one far more serene;
Trembling forth, as the eddies flow,
I walk the segregated row.


Michael Anderson


But dreams—of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die: 
~Poe~

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Re: Segregated

Post by LorettaYoung » September 6th, 2014, 5:49 pm

Such haunting pain in this loss of love; so many emotions in that darkness; guilt, regret, ultimately of course love the depth of which is so intense it cannot be shared, Beautiful imagery and flow of sadness, the darkness of loneness. Very nicely done, haunting and beautiful. Loretta



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Re: Segregated

Post by dwells » September 7th, 2014, 6:18 am

A new meaning to the word Michael between the living and the dead. The loss and longing in this were universal and palpable and the chosen form was an exquisite rendering with a deft touch, much enjoyed. "The evil that men do lives after them while the good is oft interred with their bones" Brutus from "Julius Caesar" - cheers!


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Post by Mr Goth » September 16th, 2014, 2:34 pm

I tried so hard not to think maiden but I couldn't. i enjoyed the imaginary allot and the story was wicked and smothered in darkness

~chuck



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Re: Segregated

Post by ladylynnmary » September 16th, 2014, 5:18 pm

Dearest Darkness. The main thing I picked up here was loneliness, and a deep, deep sadness. This truly moved me.

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Lynn



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Re: Segregated

Post by everhopeful » September 29th, 2015, 8:20 am

Although this plays heavily upon the symbolism and imagery of death, I can't help but wonder if it's a metaphorical death and more of a mournful piece on the loss of a way of life. The very rhythmic, ballad-style approach to the narrative makes for such a smooth read, even with the aching content.
The title 'Segregated' doesn't even begin to tell half the story here as the sense of isolation is palpable, more so in context with the mourning.
Congratulations on the spotlight!



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Post by TripleP » September 29th, 2015, 9:43 am

Both haunting and hopeful at the same time. Frightening and beautiful. The contrasts and superlatives mark this as a masterpiece.


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Re: Segregated

Post by Ladywildalice » September 30th, 2015, 9:19 pm

Michael: This truly brought tears to my eyes. There is such deep, swirled resignation. It is palpable in its acceptance of the mournful sadness it now suffers. So very touching, so human, and so very real. Many should identify with this. Congratulations on the Spotlight. This truly needed to be showcased, it is wonderful.


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Re: Segregated

Post by dornicks » October 1st, 2015, 2:35 pm

A good informed write,enhanced by the quality rhyming and flow of your piece. Congratulations on the Spotlight.

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Post by Josie » October 3rd, 2015, 9:09 pm

I liked the way you started and ended your poem with
'Trembling forth, as the eddies flow,
I walk the segregated row—
I thought about the segregated space between life and death, and the path the living walk on as they pass by the gravestones.
Congratulations on the TPS Spotlight.


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Re: Segregated

Post by Darkness » October 11th, 2015, 12:00 am

I want to thank all who've replied to this piece in my absence. I am honored by the reception given it, as well as by its nomination here. Quite humbling words.

Michael


But dreams—of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die: 
~Poe~

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