I meet her eyes through
the glass as she
exhales the smoke,
From fires lit inside,
fueled by the desire to
be loved,
Extinguished by the lack
of it
Sipping my coffee
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Re: Sipping my coffee
I like the set of this piece and can observe what transpires. Feel the inner need of the speaker. Enjoy this type of work!!
Thanks,
Jovel
Thanks,
Jovel
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Re: Sipping my coffee
This does conjure up an indelible image; for the reader to dredge from memories and sigh with recognition. Cheers Coll! - Dan
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Re: Sipping my coffee
Lovely piece. Each word seems to be so carefully chosen. Concise and captivating. Loved it.
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Re: Sipping my coffee
A simple glance can tell so much. It's short but it hits the mark with deadly precision. Good job.
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