mystery candle night
let fall the pendant moon
too soon the morrow light
at precipice of time
I tempt impossible height
awake my dreams and live
to fly with thee tonight
Flight
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Re: Flight
Awesome job! Keep on writing! :)
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Re: Flight
Great stuff with the '-ight' rhymes and I'm intrigued by the imagery and the tone since this could be taken so very differently - falling from a height but trying to fly.
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Re: Flight
Read your stuff before and I tend to enjoy almost everything you post. Great word choice to make it uniquely you still used economy to bring to a close. It doesn't feel rushed either.
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lovelornpaper
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Re: Flight
The brevity of this is what draws me in - it feels like every word was carefully selected for maximum impact. Congrats on the Spotlight!
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