The Three Captains

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The Three Captains

Post by DreamerSeeker » May 23rd, 2016, 6:58 pm

Three captains aboard a boat,
out at sea from dawn till dusk
drinking booze from their boots,
getting buzzed and carrying on

One captain looks out the window
he spots something he'll never forget
he notions to his partners
who also take a glance
what they see, they'll never forget

Out that old foggy window
in the deep waters, calm and blue,
a great white heading their way
slamming into the side of the boat
making it sway from left to right

By the time the captains did as they needed
they've realized then it was already too late
water seeping in from the walls
the boat was filling by the minute

One man thought he could jump and be free,
another thought he could use something to drift across the sea
the last man standing thought he could patch the holes
while the water was only 5 inches deep.


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Re: The Three Captains

Post by Kurt » May 24th, 2016, 3:30 am

Ha! I guess panic superseded common sense in this case. Good one!



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Post by DreamerSeeker » May 24th, 2016, 9:05 pm

Thank you for reading! :)


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Re: The Three Captains

Post by mangodog » May 25th, 2016, 12:58 pm

Jaws - come and get it!!!!!!!!

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Re: The Three Captains

Post by DreamerSeeker » May 25th, 2016, 3:45 pm

Thank you very much for reading, glad you enjoyed!

To be honest it was "Jaws" that inspired me to write this! :D


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Re: The Three Captains

Post by rupertpupkin » August 12th, 2020, 9:12 am

Well done on the spotlight


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Re: The Three Captains

Post by The ghost » August 13th, 2020, 9:59 am

YES. Jaws came to mind.
I like that you used the classic triumvirate.
Gonna need a bigger boat!


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Re: The Three Captains

Post by soldierpoet » August 20th, 2020, 9:20 am

Fascinating write! Congrats on the spotlight!


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