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[SongUnsung]

Just a flirty remark,
a simple complement,

And little do we see
the chain we've begun.

And we stay up in the night,
tip tap tip tap

Did I say the right thing?
Am I too obvious?

Hours and hours,
and I'll come back for more

And I'll be here,
waiting.

A joke, light-hearted
flirty flirty

But she's here too,
and she know who's holding my attention.

And she used the word love,
and suddenly, I'm not so sure.

But she can see it too,
and she understands

but is it right?
Is it okay?

I know how she hurts,
and I don't want to hurt her more.

...
You still there?

Of course.

[seraph1420]

this was just so cute and.....different!

nothing like i've ever read before, i love it!
you did a great job.

seraph

[karrie]

I really like the way this is formatted and the way it feels. Nicely done!

[Kornelia]

Yes, it pictures a very known thing in modern life, texting, chatting, and digital lovers...
Very well written, enjoyed!

[riversidepoet]

This was great , how unique, I hardly know what to say except that I love it, thanks for sharing

[jwesley]

Beautifully written!!

Personally I didn't like having to jump clear across the page to read the second speaker - just a tab or two would have been enough, or a line skip, a tab's inset and different text style to denote the 2nd speaker.

But the words themselves were wonderful ... really enjoyed reading this piece.


j.

[jayn]

This is remarkably text like, but kind of funny too, " Hours and hours,and I'll come back for more."
There is the palpable suspense of waiting for the next text held in the gap between the two columns of poetry. "You still there?" Oh so much doubt ensues. And relief, "Of course!" It's such an interesting poem about texting. Chuckling.

[rupertpupkin]

Wonderful poem. Very much enjoyed and loved the formatting. Well done on the spotlight.

[Windsend]

Congratulations on the spotlight. Well deserved. The originality is inspiring and changes the tempo of the forums. One in a million as an odd man out! Good job. Always a pleasure.
Brad-

[Josie]

Creative style and technique brings pleasure to the reader. Congratulations on the TPS spotlight.