the you I loved

Post by **Merin** » July 25th, 2016, 11:29 pm

The you that I loved
Wasn't petty
Wasn't dramatic
Wasn't hurtful
Wasn't shy
Wasn't hating
Wasn't blaming
Wasn't whining
Wasn't any
of the things that you are today

The you that I loved
Was a man
Who cared
And gave
And lived
And laughed
Who loved
And tried
And never once
gave up

Yet here we are now
Hateful vengeance flowing through hardened veins
As silent screams tear the walls from my brain
And all that's left is an empty space
Where it all used to be

The whims, the fantasies, the lies
Of a love that never dies
A love went unborn
Her dreams
Never once, crossed the decayed recesses of our minds

Post by **IronHeart** » July 25th, 2016, 11:34 pm

Powerful write for the OM. I've heard it said that about every two years a relationship will go through a change, some of us grow older and sweeter.. and others become hardened like a battleaxe. The latter way is all to easy to slip into, and the results are devastating.. as you describe well. Its a good write you did here, honest message.. thanks for sharing it.

and hey, welcome to TPS (c=

Post by **sparky21737** » July 26th, 2016, 1:41 am

Hey, welcome to TPS look forward to reading more of your work. Anyway....

This was a really powerful OM. It sad that sometimes when you watch the person that you love change, the things that you loved about them no longer exists and everything as change to hate. Well written and thanks for sharing

Sparky

Post by **cafeboy** » August 10th, 2016, 3:17 am

I felt like this was very theatrical like a monologue. Very brave things to come forward and say. Be strong. Glad to read you.

Post by **aoeclald** » September 27th, 2016, 6:03 pm

Very emotional write. I'm particularly fond of the second to last stanza. :) 'silent screams' is a phrase that is ever more prominent it seems, but I love that combination so much whenever it rears its head in good poetry.

Thanks for sharing!

Post by **Josie** » January 1st, 2019, 11:46 pm

The change in the couple happens to a number of people. It is drastic, shocking, and alarming. The only person I think you can change is yourself. For the couple in trouble, perhaps it is better to begin that second verse with thoughts about yourself.
The me that you loved
Was a woman
Who cared
And gave
And lived
And laughed
Who loved
And tried
And never once
gave up.

Anyway, your poem reflects a reality as it is written, so I wouldn't change it.

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