In Your Loop

[AngelOfSilence]

I do not take this lightly
Don’t pretend this is easy
As the thoughts give way to insanity
And my chest bursts with anxiety

I am no pawn of the devil
But these thoughts are disheveled
Chaos ensues at every level
I watch my whole world unravel

I am worlds and universes away
But the lessons you taught stay
I am unsteady on my feet to this day
The foundation you built was frayed

I blamed you, I hated you
I’ve been stuck in your loop
I keep trying to rebuild and undo
Every horror I was born into

But when my breath is shallow
And my mind and body feel hollow
I am brought back to swallow
To sit at your pews, row by row

Let live and let go is what they tell me
We are all one, forgiven and clean
But the blood is filling my eyes, you see
It is on your head, you call me crazy

I am raw bones, beneath you
The product of your beliefs ensue
I do not know how to forgive you
So here I remain, in your loop.

[SilentTears]

Very raw and powerful. The emotions are turbulent and the rhyming is nice. Great flow and imagery to this piece too. The subject matter is obviously very complicated, but it seems to me like the subject is sick of going in these vicious circles. It's especially tragic that she feels she never had a chance.

Very tragic, very anxious, very frustrating. Well done.

-Muse of Tears

[Jahaliel]

oh. this was a hard hitting piece - and it really hit home with me. third stanza to the end was just. really affecting.

[Chelle]

you have those things that you cling to because if you don't you feel you have nothing. Or you just can't cut the tether that binds you. You have to get to the place and do whatever you can until you can grab your freedom. cause all it does is chain you down for sure.

[Rainn]

Wow. I can relate to your poem. My take away is an adult who cannot shake an unsatisfactory childhood. A adult who finds that traumas as well as lesson learned are on repeat play - a continual loop of dismay.

[rupertpupkin]

A very well written piece. Well done on the spotlight.