Mahal Ko

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Mahal Ko

Post by tmtamish » April 1st, 2018, 12:52 am

Into light
Where obscurity reigned
Steps eager, hesitant
Yet surely

Your hands
In mine
Your lips
To mine


I feel you
Deep within me
Wrapped round my heart
Indelibly writ

Your hands
In mine
Your lips
To mine


Words between us
Carry beyond
What can be said
We are one.

Your hands
In mine
Your lips
To mine

I am yours
Utterly
You are my love
Mahal ko

Mahal kita




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Re: Mahal Ko

Post by miharu » May 6th, 2018, 5:45 pm

What a beautiful expression of the speaker's love. I particularly enjoyed the idea of words conveying even more than their meanings, places in between the repeating stanzas of hands and lips also communicating.



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Re: Mahal Ko

Post by sparky21737 » June 28th, 2018, 2:12 am

I loved this piece it perfectly expressed the depth of emotion and love to it. I loved the repeating stanzas, because each time it was repeated it seemed to convey a deeper meaning. Well written and thanks for sharing

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Re: Mahal Ko

Post by Versus » June 28th, 2018, 8:27 am

Mahal Ko! Mahal Ko! What does "mahal ko" mean? Nevermind; I love this lovely piece of art!


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Re: Mahal Ko

Post by tmtamish » June 30th, 2018, 12:35 pm

It means "my love" in Tagalog.
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Re: Mahal Ko

Post by Versus » June 30th, 2018, 1:16 pm

No! Thank You! -_-


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Re: Mahal Ko

Post by rupertpupkin » September 17th, 2019, 5:27 pm

Clever poem. Love the repetition and the wonderfully emotions conjured up by the use of some foreign (to me) language. Well done on a most deserving spotlight


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Re: Mahal Ko

Post by Josie » September 27th, 2019, 10:41 pm

The repetition verse of hands and lips blended well with the love message and words of another language.
My favorite stanza is the following:
Words between us
Carry beyond
What can be said
We are one.


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