Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
-
- Regular Member
- Posts:184
- Joined:September 24th, 2012, 5:52 pm
I walk passed
As they stare
Judging me.
The Thieves
The Murderers
The Pedophiles
The Abusive Parents
The Wife beaters
The Racists
The People who cheat on their taxes...
They're all judging me.
But maybe they're right
Maybe I'm the bad guy.
I mean, only Scumbags
Smoke Marlboros in public...
As they stare
Judging me.
The Thieves
The Murderers
The Pedophiles
The Abusive Parents
The Wife beaters
The Racists
The People who cheat on their taxes...
They're all judging me.
But maybe they're right
Maybe I'm the bad guy.
I mean, only Scumbags
Smoke Marlboros in public...
-
- Regular Member
- Posts:246
- Joined:April 18th, 2012, 2:50 am
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
Twas poetic justice and quite an interesting philosophical view.
It was a form of accusotory poetry that is quite rare these days.
Judging is sadly a human thing to do, particurlarly smoking-
as it is associated with "bad people." It was simple, short,
and to the point.
Looking forward to more!
It was a form of accusotory poetry that is quite rare these days.
Judging is sadly a human thing to do, particurlarly smoking-
as it is associated with "bad people." It was simple, short,
and to the point.
Looking forward to more!
“I soon realized that poets do not compose their poems with knowledge, but by some inborn talent and by inspiration, like seers and prophets who also say many fine things without any understanding of what they say.”
-Socrates
-Socrates
-
- Regular Member
- Posts:327
- Joined:April 18th, 2012, 8:10 pm
- Location:The belle jar
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
I can't say I agree with you about smoking in public, but I agree, there are greater crimes committed in private.
-
- Elite Member
- Posts:3627
- Joined:April 17th, 2012, 12:21 am
- Location:Deep in the heart of Texas
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
I absolutely love the title of this! This is such a great write!
-
- Regular Member
- Posts:242
- Joined:April 20th, 2012, 12:23 pm
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
Beautiful poem! We mere humans are all prone to fault, one of which being our desire to judge other people in order to feel more justified about our own petty lives. What a better way to illustrate this than with such a bold and concise poem. I enjoyed this poem.
In creation of one essence and soul.
If one member is afflicted with pain,
Other members uneasy will remain.
If you've no sympathy for human pain,
The name of human you cannot retain!
~ Saadi
-
- Regular Member
- Posts:58
- Joined:August 2nd, 2012, 3:16 pm
- Location:USA
- Contact:
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
I guess you could say that I don't get this one. It is too meandering a trail for me to walk on.
"Smart girls turn me on; why, I don't know...
But hard-working ones, even more so..." - B>R>L>E>W>I>S
But hard-working ones, even more so..." - B>R>L>E>W>I>S
- Ladywildalice
- Elite Member
- Posts:4572
- Joined:April 18th, 2012, 5:22 pm
- Location:Wichita, Kansas
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
This is GREAT!!!!!! You are fast becoming the King of Tongue-In-Cheek on this site and I Love it. Thanks for another very enjoyable read. I'm still grinning. Saved on bookmark for another time, when a grin and an "Atta-boy" is needed.
'Where ecstasy leaves gravity and dances with wild eyes' by Ladywildalice
-
- Elite Member
- Posts:2290
- Joined:May 13th, 2014, 9:14 am
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
This is fantastic. Loved the unexpected ending and the clever title. Good work.
Bear
Bear
"I cry out for magic/I feel it dancing in the light/It was cold/Lost my hold/To the shadows of the night" (Ronnie James Dio)
- bumblebee
- Regular Member
- Posts:206
- Joined:August 14th, 2013, 7:38 am
- Location:by the lake..
Re: Dirty Looks Leave Me... Smoking.
i really love this.. i should give up really but i smoke as well, and i feel so guilty for doing it anywhere now. There are definitely worse 'crimes' out there x
Sorrows woven
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
heart worn..
sing of sadness
until hope brings Dawn..
-
- Moderator
- Posts:3342
- Joined:April 19th, 2012, 10:03 am