Her rawness was sheer magic,
and the incompleteness haunting;
Failures of hers, intoxicating;
I never felt much complete, feeling.
Her breakage, was binding and the hold
breathtaking, I have been a wreck before,
But the other evening, her harshness
was endearing, enlivening and heart-moving.
Rawness
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I Die everytime you gaze
a little longer,
Wish I could
but you are so transparent,
Sigh!
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Re: Rawness
The authenticity of another human being is always such a rare thing to come across nowadays, with the layers of facades people wear all the time. Beautiful poem!
"The act of writing is an act of optimism. You would not take the trouble to do it if you felt it didn't matter." ~Edward Albee
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Re: Rawness
I enjoyed the fact that despite her flaws and imperfections,
she really got to you...
different. good job.
she really got to you...
different. good job.
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Re: Rawness
I love the push and pull of this. You capture it perfectly with the title. There is definitely a 'rawness' to this. I think it's really interesting to try and imagine myself in the speaker's shoes and I like this part in particular:
"I have been a wreck before,
But the other evening, her harshness
was endearing, enlivening and heart-moving."
Lily^^
"I have been a wreck before,
But the other evening, her harshness
was endearing, enlivening and heart-moving."
Lily^^
"The night is dark and full of terrors."
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Re: Rawness
This has such raw and relatable emotion in it, and the flow of the words is just beautiful as well to read. The idea that vulnerability is a big part of attractiveness is a beautiful and true thought as well because I do believe that we need to truly know and accept someone for their strengths and vulnerabilities if we are going to love them because in doing so we are accepting them for who they really are; you take someone for who they are. It sounds like an attraction/love for a special somebody.
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Re: Rawness
Super poem with surprising and unique word choices. Well done on a most deserving spotlight.